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"A long-time African American congregant"--was he a congregant for a long time? Or black? Misplaced modifiers are fun, especially with unnecessary indications of race.
— Sep 03, 2014 10:31AM
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"Several small glasses--the kind you fill with alcohol, not water." SuperChristianAwkwardTemperanceLanguageGo! Let's fix this: "several shot glasses sat in the sink." "The sink was filled with brandy snifters." "Several cocktail tumblers sat unwashed in the sink." Literally any sentence like this.
— Sep 03, 2014 07:24AM
