J’s Reviews > Oblivion's Blade > Status Update
J
is 90% done
The tangents and useless padding are killing me. A lot of the stuff happening throughout took too long because of how much useless and endless crap was added. Really could've used some editing to make the story actually flow. The extraneous crap hurts the story.
— Oct 25, 2021 02:24AM
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J
is 30% done
So far I enjoy the story and premise, but I'm getting annoyed quite often by the endless introspective soliloquy the MC has. He's in his head way too fuckin much. Less introspection, more focus on what's actually happening and the action. Less annoying introspection and corny villain rants, and more acting.
— Oct 22, 2021 08:52AM
