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Delia
is 12% done
I see potential in the story, but the way they talk...
1. too wordy. It's OK to just say yes or no sometimes.
2. I feel as if the characters discuss things and ask question for our benefit. I may know the info, but the dialogue sounds fake.
— Mar 07, 2014 03:31AM
1. too wordy. It's OK to just say yes or no sometimes.
2. I feel as if the characters discuss things and ask question for our benefit. I may know the info, but the dialogue sounds fake.
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Delia
is 4% done
The story started powerful and lusty - always a good thing.
But I don't understand the use of word "flesh". Once... maybe. But more than once? When I read about thrusting flesh inside the body I DO NOT have erotic images in my mind. It makes me shudder.
— Mar 03, 2014 11:49PM
But I don't understand the use of word "flesh". Once... maybe. But more than once? When I read about thrusting flesh inside the body I DO NOT have erotic images in my mind. It makes me shudder.
Delia
is 4% done
The story started powerful and lusty - always a good thing.
But I don't understand the use of word "flesh". Once... maybe. But more than once? When I read about thrusting flesh inside the body I DO NOT have erotic images in my mind.
— Mar 03, 2014 11:48PM
But I don't understand the use of word "flesh". Once... maybe. But more than once? When I read about thrusting flesh inside the body I DO NOT have erotic images in my mind.
