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Flor-san
is 70% done
The narrative is poor. On descriptions, characters development. At first, she seemed as a total powerful and punk girl! But she is following The popular-cute guy around like a puppy.
There’re inconsistencies, for Example when Mr. Hollows talks about the last time he saw Declan “he was overwhelmed,(…)between your arrival, the pack and work…” he wasn’t supposed to know that she knew about the pack!
— Jun 10, 2021 02:39PM
There’re inconsistencies, for Example when Mr. Hollows talks about the last time he saw Declan “he was overwhelmed,(…)between your arrival, the pack and work…” he wasn’t supposed to know that she knew about the pack!
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Flor-san
is 70% done
I like the story… but the narrative is little poor. On descriptions, on the characters development. At first, Louvette seemed like a total kickass, powerful and punk girl! But she is following The popular-cute guy around like a puppy. It makes me think how did she manage to get expelled from several schools?
— Jun 10, 2021 02:40PM
