Elithanathile’s Reviews > Age Rules > Status Update

// This was an adorable story, it really was!! I would have rated this higher had the writing been much more on point ... had the editing been a lot more solid, and had there not been so many typos and mistakes :-/!! In the meantime, I can only give it 3 stars :-/!!

// Holy shit!!! One or both of these authors has a BIG problem with past/present/tense and/or progressive!! I am guessing it’s Jacki James because I noticed this in another book of hers, which was FULL of bad writing that really could have benefited from an editor (and the book suffered because of it)!! Seriously where was the editor?!? And of an editor DID check this book, she/he needs to be fired pronto!!!!!

// I feel like smacking Andre’s father 😡😡😡!! HARD 😡😡😡😡😡😡😡!!

// Yup, the writing is a bit choppy here [I'll presume this is Jacki's portion and not Michelle's], so I am trying to focus ONLY on the story and not the writing o__O!! More to the point, it seems since this book is both a continuation and a crossover of two different series, there are a bunch of other characters I am totally clueless on o__O!! I'm focusing ONLY on Darren & Andre though, so hopefully that helps!!!!!!

// We're off to an interesting start ... so it's looking good so far!!! But please, Book, PLEASE don't have all the typos and spelling mistakes Jacki James's other book was so full of :-/! I anticipate Jacki hitting her stride and that this book isn't as quick to rush into varying side-plots either!! Both are new-to-me authors, but I do think I read a book by Frost; it was good!! Here's hoping the goodness continues!