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Steven Allen
is 55% done
Combat scenes are well done very descriptive. Author describes scenes, people and things very well - especially good at vividly describing disgusting slimy slug people and incredibly beautiful beast women. Author needs to work on dialog its a little stilted sometimes. Also needs more showing less telling. Good twist on the HAL 9000 trope without overdoing it.
— Jan 08, 2018 07:11AM
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Steven Allen
is 41% done
Odd that this is the second fantasy book I have read in a row featuring nagas. Something missing from the beginning of this book. What is missing is the hook, that thing that grabs the reader and pulls them into the story. The hook does not appear until the beginning of chapter #4. The author needs to grab the reader, get them invested in his characters, or he will lose readers within the first 20 pages.
— Jan 07, 2018 11:02PM
Steven Allen
is 24% done
Well this has certainly been a surprisingly decent read. I am dubious when authors ask for honest reviews. This book badly needs developmental and line editing. Not the worse unedited book that I have read and actually one of the better of the author-requested-review books so far. Great descriptions. The author's technical skills are excellent; needs work on dialog and character building.
— Jan 07, 2018 07:35PM
Steven Allen
is 2% done
The author generously offered a copy of his book for an honest review. I have to admit that without the author's generous offer of a free copy of the book, I probably would never have purchased or read it. The author has one of the best bios I have read in a long time; if his bio is an indication of his writing skill then this could be a great book.
— Jan 06, 2018 11:36AM
