Beate’s Reviews > Between a Jock and a Hard Place > Status Update

The grammar and punctuation, among other things, is all over the place.

You can count their relationship in days, if not hours - and already he's told her more lies than she is comfortable with. But dang it if she doesn't forgive him?
Books are an escape, but whatever world they're written in, I'd like for them to be at least believable.

First of all, didn't even take them 2 minutes to jump into bed on their first date. Hell, date hadn't even begun just yet. And the dance between the sheets was so short it took me longer to write this than the scene itself.

OK. There really isn't a whole lot of "showing" going on here, it's all dialogue and blah-blah-blah.

They sure have no chemistry for someone who just "took her heart away".
She's bratty, annoying and needs a reality check. Yup. A real winner this one...

For two people about to hook up, they sure don't seem to like each other...