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"Oh! How perfectly pomiferous!"

???

Are these pearls...apple-like, in some way?

Typo: missing quotation mark before "I once had..."

Ozma finally shows up in a story that theoretically revolves around her, and it's just to tell us that she's currently useless.

Well, still better than when she's in Deus Ex Machina Mode.

You know, they don't need to spend so long repeating things we already know. You can just say something like "And then the two groups exchanged stories" and save us a lot of time.

"And we've scarcely begun!"

And yet we're more than halfway through the story. I felt like the pacing was off.

Typo: Unnecessary extra quotation mark in the middle of a character speaking.

"Four times his size?" Since when is Roquat/Ruggedo only a foot tall?

"Four times his size?" Since when is Roquat/Ruggedo only a foot tall?

I hardly think this counts as EVERYTHING that happens in the world if Oz is covered by three sentences.

Does this mean, by logical extension, that he was the ONLY person in Oz with something on his mind?

"Dorothy, Betsy Bobbin and Trot had fainted dead away."

PLEASE. My girl Dorothy has faced worse than this. I see what Thompson is going for, trying to make it like she has PTSD from the tornado, but her main reaction to that was that it was BORING. She is clearly underplaying Dorothy's spunk.