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MC doesn’t learn ambiguity but suddenly is now absolutely sure of the opposite.

Here’s the Road Back. Master of the Two Worlds and Freedom to Live is next

Nice twist but it sort of breaks the logic of the book.

Apotheosis and Boon would be next.

Death of mentor. We must be in step 8, The Ordeal, of the Heros Journey.

Taking away their agency for some reason. — “…they were subservient little beasts. That was why they were so brazen…”

Interesting that the narrator characterizes antagonistic girls as no longer girls, but antagonistic boys as still boys. — “They did not seem to have the expressions of girls.”

Lol. - “And it smelled like home.”

Not explaining how Sofia learned her wilderness skills and then praising her for having them.

The last configuration that I can think of would be a woman handing her over to the Enemy.

Interesting unacknowledged internal misogyny

I like these little vignettes that remind me of old medieval quest stories, like Piers Plowman

Slowly transforming into her mother. — “She fantasized about being an adult. She imagined herself sitting at a café, wearing a fabulous coat. She would say so many fascinating things…”

Most of the chapters are flashbacks.

Random decision towards danger.

It’s an Interesting choice that, following a quick moment of violence, the author goes on to write long paragraphs of tangential description. — “It smelled like a bucket of brass doorknobs. It smelled like the footprints of horses. It smelled like steel wool. It smelled like…”

Writes the writer. : “That was the power writers had. When you read them, the author was right there with you, sharing their ideas.”

Didn’t realize that I’d be reading another war book.

wild tactic. — “We can only control what we do and hope other people make the right choices.”

Kiela doesn’t love Larran; she just needs an assistant.

I can’t help but notice that Kiela doesn’t know anything about Larran nor cares to ask.

“…but he’s careful with his heart.”

new antagonist suddenly appears at midpoint.

random. — “I know, but they need our help.”

ok. random conflict. — “But I am going.”

I live in a small town. It's not like this. But Wordsworth would have liked these descriptions.

chapter 9: non-negotiations with Bryn.

Random illegal idea from lawful good MC.

Random illegal idea from lawful good MC.

Anxious Sidekick here to infuse conflict where there is none.