Status Updates From Dusk Mountain Blues (Dusk O...

The writing style got a lot better from chapter 3 onwards. Now awaiting the plot...

I'm struggling here. Both with the setting as is, as with the writing style.
I can park the setting gripes, but the writing is grating on my soul. Every 6 line paragraph is a mini exposure. It goes like this:
Descriptive scene, action, or fact. Followed by a tell, not show. I'm not a puritan when it comes to the "show, don't tell" principle. But every paragraph has the same rhythm. It's almost poetry 🤔

This is such an interesting sci-fi book, and I hope it gets republished with DYB publishing to clean up some of the smaller errors because this is a fun read!