Status Updates From Stowaway (Redleg in Space #1)

This probably gets better but I can’t continue. The writing style is just not my cuppa.

Out in the weeds again.

Seems more focus on semantics then creativity.

So the alien is like here human drink this “I’m pretty sure it’s safe to drink.” Yeah, how about noooo.

And apparently translators are so nuanced they also translate slang and cultural differences. And the aliens talk like humans. Even seem to think like humans too.

Alright that was interesting.

End of chapter 1. I’m hoping chapter 2 is where things will start to get interesting.

You’re in the weeds buddy.

Start of chapter 1. Prologue is now over.

All tell no show.

Not a good start. Writing is clunky and amateurish.

"all is forgiven."

What an idiot

"retrieve the location data for Zade’s homeworld"

(thought they lost the drone, not launched the drone to unity)

"the Chancellor grabbed her arm"

At which point she should have broken it for daring to touch her

"A kick from one of the guards broke a couple of ribs"

But his bones were all laced with carbon nanotubes weave...I mean.. Maybe they're that strong but it's very odd

"I didn’t make you part of the crew,"

But Ajax did.

"the interior temperature would drop to nearly -150 degrees in two hours."

That's not how space works but I'll allow it

"two uniform tops, an"

Where'd he get *two* tops? His and lizardman?

"Do you know how many times I’ve met a woman that could best me on the mats? None."

Because they're physiologically incapable. Only reason she won was due to extensive nanite augmentation. Even then, being a trained warrior you should have easily beat her with sheer skill and experience.

"Zade kicked off his shoes and socks and headed for his bathroom, still unaware that he wasn’t alone. He turned on the shower, as hot as he could stand it, and stepped in."

Does Zade always shower in his underwear?

"No one has ever tried to hit on me"

Thought her childhood friend admitted she was considered a very attractive woman?

"she said as she rained down blows on Zade’s head and neck."

Thought this was supposed to be a grappling spar, not a full contact MMA fight.

"deck to recover any navigational data on Earth,"

Horseshit. No way an exploratory vessel is going to throw away nav data. Copy it and send it back to base? Yes. Completely delete it? No way.