Status Updates From Obscura

This has gotten so much better & very suspenseful.

I've figured out what it feels like. That jarring feeling of quickly jumping around among four different time periods. It feels like being in a manual car with someone who doesn't know how to drive a stick, and it keeps stopping & starting. It can't really *get going* or pick up any momentum. And it surely doesn't feel smooth! That's what the first ten chapters have felt like so far.

42 pages in, and this story has bounced around soooo much: "Now" (present day), 2 months before, 8 years ago, and then the NASA transcripts that have come from sometime in the future... It's not too difficult to keep the period straight, since there are chapter headers that show when each takes place, but it's just a bit jarring jumping back & forth & all around in FOUR different time periods so far.