Status Updates From Once Upon a Travel

This might turn out to be a really cute story, but the grammar and spelling mistakes are killing me. The editing was inadequate at best. And, I'm having a hard time believing the characters. The boys don't relate to each other the way I'm used to kids relating (as a teacher). The writing makes the book choppy and confusing at times. I'll keep trying because I love science fiction, but I may have to let this one go.

9th chapter

4th chapter