Status Updates From Bone Pickers Diary

This needs serious editing. There are a lot of grammar mistakes and incorrect use of commas. More importantly, am I reading the stories of three different Edgars? There's some weird overlapping happening, and it would explain the strange backtracking happening in the storyline.

This really needs more editing. Lots of issues with grammar and incorrect usage of commas. More importantly, am I reading the stories of three different Edgars? Something weird is happening on that front and it would explain the strange overlapping of the story and why the story keeps going back over itself.

Excellent on chapter 4