Cassandra's Writing

[Tala]

I wanted a separate thread to post my writings and get critiques. Here is a post I've done for school. I had to create a story using the key words highlighted within the post and basing the character off of some character questions that someone else did. I just wanted someone's opinions to improve it.

http://sirisdreams.tumblr.com/post/27...

[Tala]

Here's a few more posts I wouldn't mind getting critiqued on. This one I had to choose a photo and write about that character making a sandwich.
http://sirisdreams.tumblr.com/post/27...

This one I had to choose some one else's sandwich story and write from the sandwich's point of view.
http://sirisdreams.tumblr.com/post/27...

[Ingrid, Just another writer.]

great. i will look at it as soon as possible in my spare time.

[Tala]

Ingrid wrote: "great. i will look at it as soon as possible in my spare time."

Thanks! Any feed back would be awesome.

[Ingrid, Just another writer.]

kk

[Ingrid, Just another writer.]

the link in your first post had a unique tone in the story, special, unordinary in a very interesting way! I already felt grappled in your hook in the beginning of the story. Abigail made me chuckle throughout the chapter or short story or just curious too. This character's past i'd like more of. But it was great. I loved it. Vocabulary was magnificent. Sentence structure was neat. everything i was looking for

[Tala]

Ingrid wrote: "the link in your first post had a unique tone in the story, special, unordinary in a very interesting way! I already felt grappled in your hook in the beginning of the story. Abigail made me chuckl..."

Why thank you! I blame school ;)

[Tala]

http://sirisdreams.tumblr.com/post/27...

That's a link to my screenplay for class. Sorry it's not formatted exactly how it was in my PDF file. I need some serious criticism for it because it's going to be in my final portfolio for the class.

[Tala]

This is my final script. Let me know what you think. I'm still going to improve it over time.

https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B8aA...

[Jessica]

The title of this topic has been changed to "Cassandra's Writing" as of 5/9/2013.