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Jan 16, 2015 02:58AM
I agree the legs and boots part of the image looks better. What sort of fonts did you think you were going to go for? I also think the text works with the image.
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Michelle - I honestly couldn't identify any fonts beyond Times New Roman and Arial! I tend to flick through the font choices in Photoshop until I find one that looks right. I know what you mean about the legs and boots.Jim - thanks, that's good to hear. Strictly speaking it doesn't really make grammatical sense, but it's something that someone could easily say on the battlefield.
Might be worth putting the text in the same style as the picture, a sort of cream/grey text with a black/dark grey stroke around the letters. Most people won't be able to tell if they are reading it on a e-reader but it would look better on tablet devices on the Kindle app.
I like the title. The pic is a good start on the cover.
Well, the unanimous verdicts have certainly made my life easier!Good suggestion with keeping everything looking sepia, Michelle.
Looks like I'm going to busy with the pixels this weekend...
Going by your other covers, it'll be great.
Right, this is what I've come up with so far this morning. I did try putting the text box higher but it didn't really look right. If I put it lower then it ends up hiding the soldier's arm and gun.I can also see that the sand around the text at the bottom will need a bit of cleaning as it merges with some of the letters. Some of the text isn't completely centralised but that only take a few clicks to correct.
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Very good, very powerful.
I like that... except for the bit of image above the writing. I don't like the split image really. I'd prefer it if the title and its background were right at the top.
I think that would give the wrong proportions and balance to the layout Kath. Perhaps if the background of the title box were slightly translucent, so that the image could be vaguely seen through it?
Okay, I've updated the post so the text box is at the top.
I prefer the split image. In the second image, the title seems... clunky? If that makes sense?
I still prefer that, Rosemary. There are both images there now. Go with the majority, Michael.
I prefer the second one but I'm not in love with the font.
And I keep reading it as 'here we go agaIn'
Patti (baconater) wrote: "And I keep reading it as 'here we go agaIn'"I do, too. But in the tune of 'Here I go Again' by Whitesnake. Oops!
How about this font? I've only changed the title.(Images now removed to speed up the page!)
Still don't like the stripe over his bum!
Nor me, Kath.Maybe if all the words in the title were the same size?
I had to make the box a bit bigger but here it is with all the letters and the words the same size:(Images now removed to speed up the page!)
Better. Now either move the box up, crop the top bit or make the box transparent.
Transparent, I think. The hint of the gun belt thingy is evocative.
I prefer having the image in two parts!Here is the box at 75% and 90% transparency.
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I like the top one, with the more transparent box :)
Top one for me, and I prefer the slither of full strength image at the top too; looks more balanced.
Top is better. Try a bit more transparent please. 60% maybe?
Oh and I'm not reading it as here we go again now the letters are the same size.
Here it is at 60% and 45% transparency.(Images now removed to speed up the page!)
60%. Cracked it Michael!
Yep, 60% for sure.Looks great!
Shame there's no small element you can Colour red like before.
Right, here it is with the text at the top and bottom all the same. Text has been centralised and I've cleared up the gumpf so it's easier to read my name.
Personally, I think 45%, but other than that, great.
Just showed it to Dave.He said that cover would definitely draw him into reading the blurb.
Guess that's our next job, eh?
David wrote: "Personally, I think 45%, but other than that, great."I thought 45 took away from the crispness of the words. Remember, it'll be much smaller on the zoo page.
Are we at crossed purposes (is that the right expression?). I meant 45% strength, meaning the lighter version (we seem to be making the same point, as in clarity of text).
Patti (baconater) wrote: "I approve."I like that one as well
Okay, this is what I've got for the blurb so far:It’s the eve of D-Day and Corporal James Bowden, alongside the rest of the Allied Armada, stands ready to once again venture into a continent ravaged by war.
Much has changed since the evacuations from Dunkirk four years earlier. The German army has been rolled back and James is eager for revenge against an enemy that has left the towns and cities of his nation in ruins, whilst women have sent ripples across all sections of society by serving their country with distinction.
Hardened by battle and hungry for justice, can James Bowden survive the horrors that lie in wait for him...?
I'm not sure that this part of the sentence works for me... 'whilst women have sent ripples across all sections of society by serving their country with distinction.' I'm unsure why, though.
Patti - soldier shoots enemiesKaty - too many 's' sounds I reckon.
"It’s the eve of D-Day and Corporal James Bowden, alongside the rest of the Allied Armada, stands ready to once again venture into a continent ravaged by war.Much has changed since the evacuations from Dunkirk four years earlier. The German army has been rolled back and James is eager for revenge against an enemy that has left the towns and cities of his nation in ruins. Women from all sections of society have been forced to rise to the challenge and serve their country in its time of need, which they have done with distinction, inevitably causing ripples of change to spread through their communities.
Hardened by battle and hungry for justice, can James Bowden survive the horrors that lie in wait for him...? "
What about something like this? Obviously, I'm not a writer. Is this too long?
Something. Revenge. Redemption.?
I think I see what you mean, Patti. How about:D Day, 1945: after licking his wounds for four long years, Corporal James Bowden is readying himself to once again take on the might of the German war machine.
After witnessing the devastation and suffering the Luftwaffe unleashed upon the towns and cities of his nation, James is eager for revenge, justice, and victory.
Hardened by battle and driven by fury, can he survive the horrors that await him in Nazi occupied France...?
That one does nothing to attract female readers, I think...
Licking his wounds is a rather horrid cliche. Sorry.
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