Week 56 - (October 15th-22nd) Poems --- Topic: Apples DONE!!

[Stephanie]

haha

[Lexi (Pink Jellyfish)]

kwl! i like it xD

[Kristen]

here we go! Tried to twist the topic a little...

She Walks

The air is chill,
a breeze is blowing.
She steps outside,
pulls her jacket close.

Her hands under her arms,
her cheeks apple red,
she walks along
as leaves fall down.

The bold purples and yellows
of fall chrysanthemums
contrast the reds and browns
of leaves on the ground.

Granny Smith apples
covered with caramel
and pumpkin spice aromas
fill the air.

But she keeps walking
oblivious to the world
of color and beauty
trying to keep her head
out of the wind...

[Kristen]

thank ya!

[Stephanie]

Thanks, Alex. And, Kristen, I really like yours too. Good job.

[M]

Stephanie: I never know what to expect! You always come up with something cool, out the blue (or in this case, the red). The lines "It was like a blinding flash; / No, it was a blinding flash" work very nicely.

Kristen: The description is great, with a lot of movement (pulls jacket close, walks oblivious, aroma of spices fill the air). I'd probably wonder why she's walking along "oblivious to the world of color and beauty" if if weren't now starving for a Granny Smith apple covered with caramel.

[Stephanie]

Haha, thank you very much, M!

[Kristen]

thanks guys.

M, she's covering her face from the wind, so instead of seeing the beauty, she's hiding from it. That's what I was trying to say at the end, but maybe it wasn't very clear...

[Kimathy]

I got it, great job you guys! :]

[Stephanie]

Winners for this week are:

First place:Jan
Second place:Al
Third place:M
Fourth place:Kimathy and Kristen
Fifth place: Stephanie and Alexis

Thank you for your participation!