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you know...have you ever considered just writing a short story in the form of a poem? i think you should try that out. i mean, considering the fact that you think your poetry is better why don't you give that a try? i did that a couple of times. there was a math class i had to take a couple of years ago where i was required to write an entrance essay about myself, which is the most boring writing assignment that can ever be assigned to a writer(in my opinion). but then we had to write exit essays at the end of the semester, so what i did to make it interesting, creative and challenging for myself i wrote the entire essay in the form of a poem. we also had to make portfolios that showcase what we considered to be our best work of the semester (yeah in a math class go figure) and for each piece of work (i.e test or quiz) we put in the portfolio we had to include an essay that explains why we chose that piece of work, so you know what i did...i wrote each paragraph in the form of a poem and got top marks for the audacity (amongst other things)...that is one of the best efforts i've ever put on paper. please excuse my brashness when i say that i want you to give that a try. i absolutely enjoy your poetry
i will definately give it a shot, but i cant promise the results will be too good. i was actually thinking of doing that for my poem "I loved you, then" but i just couldnt think of anything. but since you believe in me i will try it :) Thanks so much for all your help!
do you think rhyming in poetry makes it better or worse?
eh...honestly i'm not picky about that. i care about the emotional atmosphere carried through the fluidity of the words. and the message/story of the poem jumping out at me. if the words are too cryptic then i ain't diggin it. and yes i wrote my essay/poems by rhyming.
ok thanks i was just wondering. I'll probably switch from ryhming to non-rhyming in my short story then.
Jen wrote: "well if you think so. do you want to know my secret?...
http://www.rhymezone.com
8D"
hmmm *raises eyebrow*
not really a secret anymore now is it? ah..i never actually considered usually a rhyme machine...
i am not that great at rhyming so i go to the website mentioned above ^. I may also go to synonym.com if i dont want to use the same word twice, but cant think of what to use.
i actually dont use it that often. only on hard words when i really cant think of something that goes with my theme of writing.
understandable. hey as long as u don't consider wikipedia as a reliable source for hardcore research on such this and that then we will get along juuuuust fine :-P
no i dont find wiki reliable :) i could go on and post a bunch of randomness and ppl would probably believe me.
ok so i will post one more poem cuz i ahve to go in like five min:( but i'll be back later tonight:)*The Storm*
Rumbling black clouds,
swallow the once blue sky.
The sky, now engulfed in sooty clouds,
lights up with spindly lightning.
As I look up into what seems like nothingness
Tiny tears pour down from the sky.
And when I ask my mom
"Why is the sky crying?"
Fog starts to roll into the dark street.
The street lights flicker off and I stand there in darkness
waiting, waiting, waiting
for an answer, but it never comes.
I stand there, questioning myself
"Why? Why is the sky crying when it has done nothing wrong?
It gives us sommething to drink,
it gives our plants something to thrive on,
it flurries snow upon us bringing joy to boys and girls.
And this thunder and lightning,
now grumbling and sparking,
it may not seem pretty to you and me
but we wouldn't have understood electricity without it.
So why is the sky breaking apart and falling on me?"
I must know the answer,so
I sit
in the wet grass and wait
until I understand WHY?
Then I wake up
and notice I am still on the grass.
I look up and see
a rainbow and now I know.
I finally realize its not breaking apart
or crying
it was simply having a moment of destruction
in order to create something BEAUTIFUL.
So I go inside and I now know why there is so much
horror in the world and yet infinte amounts of beauty.
good gracious. this is beautiful jen. it really is. you have a gift
lol. thanks you guys! i dont think this one is that great, but if you like it...
you've got to be kidding me?? that poem is the sh@t jen. it really is
thanks:) i just like some of my others better. But here is another:*Laughter*
Laughter.
It escapes children's lips
and floats around for a few seconds
expressing their joy,
but then it is gone.
Disappears up into the sky.
I often wonder,
what the world would be like without
laughter.
There would still be happiness, joy, smiles
just no LAUGHTER.
When I imagine this world
I am greatful we do not live in it.
For a world with no laughter
no matter how much happiness, joy, or smiling
is not a pleasent world.
Because Laughter
is the only moment where
we forget everything,
there is no worrying,
we are TRULY happy.
And when we laugh
we go back in time
to when we were little
and laughing was all we ever did.
Laughing is the only thing in the world
to keep us going
something we look foward to
because laughter
is never ending life.
We may hear it for a second
But it keeps right on traveling
....until it comes back again.
and laughter is badass. just like this poem *cough cough* like you don't already know that =D
Thanks!ok so i was gonna start with the poetry short story, but i am not sure what to write the poems on so untiul then i will just work on writing at least one poem a day. So here is what i wrote first period when i was supossed to be doing algebra:
Heart Thief (title suggestions?)
You took it
You tore it.
You loved it
You left it.
You cared for it
You crumpled it.
You starved for it
You stabbed it.
You begged for it
You broke it.
You stloe my heart
You should have just asked for it.
thanks! do you like the title or should i change it?
no actually the title was wat intrigued me and then i read it =)
no prob. ur really good at poetry... hv u tried sending it to magazines and stuff?
oh n I hv a website www.muslimteensclub.com... u cn add stuff there. i'd really like u to add ur poetry =)
Jen wrote: "Thanks!ok so i was gonna start with the poetry short story, but i am not sure what to write the poems on so untiul then i will just work on writing at least one poem a day. So here is what i wrot..."
don't do any more algebra
and about the poetry story, no rush. something will come to you sometime
thanks for all the postive feedback u guys! Amina, i will try to add some poetry onto ur website later tonight and i haven't tried to send anything into a magazine cuz i didnt think they were good enough, but maybe i'll try. and t-rose, i dont need algebra cuz i LOVE it so i already know everything we are doing right now. so dont worry there will be plenty more poems written during math...
oh my, oh my. ATLAST I found sumone who loves algebra!!! yayy, m so excited.LOL, u so shld send em to magz, Jen. and erm, u c't self-post on my website, u'll have to send it to me on my email address. amina@muslimteensclub.com. thnks xx
ok which poem would you like? i have some others that i havent yet posted here so this is the linkhttp://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...
to all the poems i have written and posted on Goodreads.
I think laughter. its gud plus I dnt want anything love-related. so thanks :)
no problem 8D anything to help a fellow writer out.
so i just wrote a haiku because I am trying to get better at them so here is my practicing:No more you plus me
Since you broke my fragile heart
We are torn apart.
ooh. wat is haiku... i've nvr heard of that.do u knw how to write, erm... what-do-you-call-it? the one wid syllables. four in the first and second, nine in the third, 4 in the last two. sumthing like that
no i dont know how to write limerics. actually i prefer free verse. A haiku is three lines:1st= 5syllables
2nd= 7 syllables
3rd= 5 syllables
yeah and its really easy.Haikus are simple
There is no complication
For this poetry
LOL awesome. I rote poetry once upon a tym, but it aint my thing. I write articles/stories better. did u read my stry?
I just read your first chapter and I really like it. U did a great job. I promise to read more of it later:)
Poem of the Day- I hope you enjoy!*Red*
I thought I knew
What you were trying to do.
I can't even imagine
Why I let you be such a big distraction.
My thoughts were that you were trying to find the right words
But now that theory looks so absurd.
I bet you wonder why away I ran.
It's because I noticed your hands.
One time when I looked down they were red,
And that is all the reason I fled.
Whenever you would touch my face
Whenever you gave me a loving embrace
I would forget all that you had done.
I thought a new man you had become.
But now as I trace a bruise
I am glad I broke free of your abuse.
*Second Chance*
As I start to pick up my pace
The tracks I left behind erase.
I see someone chasing me at last
But it is only the shadow that I cast.
On the ice my feet pound and pound
But yet there is hardly a sound.
I keep going as the wind whispers,
As the cold makes the world look crisper.
Tiny pieces of white confetti celebrate
The beginning of my desperate escape.
Step by step I break apart,
As I listen to my thumping heart.
I race down the deserted streets
My feet drumming a silent beat.
By now the news should have spread,
The news about how I fled.
I continue with my eyes looking down,
My mouth not moving from its permanent frown.
After a while of the freezing breeze
And watching the dancing trees,
I take one last backward glance
But the people I left don't deserve a second chance.