For Haiku Poems You'd Like to Share:

[Barbara]

List poems you've written here and/or have questions about.

[Heather]

This one is from 2007... I put three haikus together to make one poem.
Not really sure that this is how haiku is supposed to be used, but...it was interesting to try.

Weathered

Born tumultuous,
waves of thunder rode the storm
that you and I spawned.

Searing the landscape,
spears of light graze the trees.
I am thrilled by it.

You are soothed by it -
gray light of terminal night.
We sleep like the dead.

[Barbara]

Interesting way to do Haiku. Never seen 3 combined but it's cute.

[Heather]

I know there is form to haiku, but the intent is supposed to be a focus on nature. Is that right or am I making it up?
This one might be closer...

September garden
grows ripe rows of shorter days;
winter reaps harvest.

[Barbara]

I think it's suppose to be based on nature but your not suppose to put your own feelings in it.

[Barbara]

Here's a website I found on some of it.

http://alexisrotellapoetry.blogharbor...

[Barbara]

I'll have to find some sites on understanding Haiku.

[[deleted user]]

G'day Barb & Heather, I recently 'found' Haiku & am enjoying the concept.

Heather, I am enjoying reading your Haiku & I don't feel I am being 'picky' but in your group of Haiku 2nd stanza, 2nd line, I only count 6 syllables, might I suggest placing 'while' in front of 'spears' to give the 7 syllable count.

I could be wrong here as I'm only a learner.

but here is a couple of my Haiku, I like to keep an Australian feel about them.

No. 1

Morning hark of crows
New sun warms Australian bush
Life is to be lived.

David J Delaney
11/03/2010 ©



No. 3

Mist on mountains high
Bellbirds sing through valleys green
Breathtaking beauty

David J Delaney
12/03/2010 ©

[Heather]

I like the image of "tiny refugees"... nice

[Heather]

Crimson colored heart,
folded paper cutout hung -
spinning memory.

[Heather]

Pumpkin’s glowing eye
grows wide from withered carved flesh -
grin becomes a scream.