Round 3 - Which blurb is better please??

[M.J.]

Hey,

I'm back for round 3 (sooorryyy!) with my endless battle of blurb writing... I'd ask social media, but the algorithm hates me on all the sites so...

Which blurb sounds better, please?


Option One:

"Seventeen-year-old Eryna never wanted to hurt anyone.

But behind the walls of her gilded cage, she hides a chilling secret: she is an Inflictor. The ability to cause pain is woven into her very being. And when the Directorate conscripts her, they will use her for their dark purposes; they will force her to comply.

Eryna knows escaping her fate is impossible.

Until she meets him.

Only he can tell her how to evade capture. If she can get him to set aside his hatred for her.

With the odds stacked against her, Eryna must find a way to gain his allegiance before it’s too late—or become the monster she never wanted to be."


Option Two:

"Seventeen-year-old Eryna has everything anyone could ever want, but her gilded cage conceals a dark secret: she is an Inflictor; the ability to cause pain is woven into her very being.

On her birthday, Eryna will be conscripted by the Directorate, the governing body of Velona—the largest city still habitable in a world ravaged by natural disasters.

Her role in the militia? To uphold peace.

Or so she’s always believed.

When Eryna uncovers the horrific truth about her role as an Inflictor, her world shatters.

She refuses to become a monster.

Desperate to escape her chilling fate, Eryna learns that the key to her freedom lies in the hands of one person—a man who loathes her very existence."

[Courtney]

I like the first one better. Well done :)

[Marissa]

I also like the first one the best 🤗

[Kasey]

I like the first one more

[M.J.]

Courtney wrote: "I like the first one better. Well done :)"

Thank you! ☺️

[M.J.]

Marissa wrote: "I also like the first one the best 🤗"

Thank you 😃

[M.J.]

Kasey wrote: "I like the first one more"

Thank you 😊

[John]

I like the first best.