I would love some advice on my newest teaser...

[Maren]

I just designed a new teaser for my book. It is a snippet from an extremely intense moment in the book. I have learned how to do graphic arts, photography and design since self publishing. From the photography to the design is all my work. The ocean and snowy owl were photographed in Ocean Shores, WA. The model is my best friend Melissa Mae. She is the model on the cover of my book and will be for the twin to Mistral, Allianora.
Here is the link to my teaser;
https://scontent-b-sjc.xx.fbcdn.net/h...

[Travis]

Hi Maren,
Just letting you know that there's an error within the text. You have "...or summoning of what lie within her...", but if you're writing it past tense, it should be "...or summoning of what lay within her."

[Maren]

Thank you! I will fix it! My editor should have caught that.... Sighhh

[[deleted user]]

OMG I like need to read your book like right now,it seems so interesting.

[Maren]

Hee hee hee....please feel free. I can help with that. Send me a direct message and we shall arrange it!

[Kaylie]

This sounds fantastic! I'll definitely have to read this.