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Amanda Artist Cat
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Jun 23, 2020 08:03PM
It's all your's, Sirija π! I look forwards to reading your works!!
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I've been working on this story for a few weeks now and it turned out to be pretty long...it's called 'The Ghosts inside her Head' and its open to interpretation. I haven't created a link for it cause its too much work...I would really like to know what your thoughts on it are (and yes, you can be as harsh as you want...the only two people that i've shared this with gave me sugarcoated compliments and they were both too nice to give me any real criticism)
Oh my gosh I'm terrified!! You are really amazing, Sirija, at scaring the wits out of me!!! π±The writing voice is fabulous, the words well-chosen, but some parts are a little bit confusing.
I'm sure this isn't all? Because we don't know anything about Aastra, only about the ghosts. Maybe you should add some more of her background and character?
No sugar-coating :)
Oh, and are you sure you are going to post it here? Another member posted her stuff, then removed it after because she was afraid of copyright problems...
Amanda (Artist Cat) wrote: "Oh, and are you sure you are going to post it here? Another member posted her stuff, then removed it after because she was afraid of copyright problems..."Do you mean someone might take this story and develop it or claim it their own? I'm fine with that because I wasn't planning to publish it or even post it here in the first place... they can do with it as they please... the longer it stayed with me alone, the higher are the chances of it ending up in the bin xD
Amanda (Artist Cat) wrote: "Oh my gosh I'm terrified!! You are really amazing, Sirija, at scaring the wits out of me!!! π±The writing voice is fabulous, the words well-chosen, but some parts are a little bit confusing.
I'm ..."
Thank you so much! Also, thanks a lot for not sugar coating it
I didn't describe Aastra because she was supposed to be a blank slate that anyone could relate to (now that I know that that isn't how a reader would see it, I'll add a few personality traits to her description)...And yes, that is all there is to the story (I'll definitely make a few changes and give a more detailed description of Aastra)
Also, could you please tell me which parts were confusing...
Thank you once again
You're very welcome! Anytime :)You can private message me if you want feedback, I'll answer you as soon as I can, I usually pop in to check my inbox pretty frequently.
(Sorry for the late reply, I was at lunch...)
