MAY - 2020 - MICROSTORY CONTEST (COMMENTS ONLY)

[Tom]

Yours was quite grand in my opinion, Marianne. (That's high praise from someone who doesn't care much for present tense.)

[Marianne]

Thank you, Tom. I poured my angst into it and the pain of my bruised fingers. I fell when I went to see my mom. I was on the ground in the rain for 5 minutes before I could even begin to pull myself up. I had three bloody fingers, a swollen palm, and a 250 mile drive back home the next day. I gritted my teeth and hauled off home after I helped her. Write what you know, they say.

I generally prefer third person past myself, but the story cries the way it wants to cry.

[Paula]

Wow, you're really going strong, Marianne! I won't say more until folks have a chance to read the stories, though. :)

[Jeremy]

Tom: Thank you for a fantastic critique.

[Marianne]

Paula, it matches my mood, that is certain.

[Tom]

Marianne wrote: "Thank you, Tom. I poured my angst into it and the pain of my bruised fingers. I fell when I went to see my mom. I was on the ground in the rain for 5 minutes before I could even begin to pull mysel..."

'Sounds like you've had a very rough trip, Marianne, and bore it well. It's admirable you can channel it through your writing. I wish you the best going forward.

[Tom]

Jeremy wrote: "Tom: Thank you for a fantastic critique."

You're very welcome, Jeremy. Thank you for a fantastic story.

[Marianne]

Tom, I never carry anything well, but I have support, and that makes all the difference :)

[Jeremy]

Jot, glad to hear your brother is on the mend.

Marianne, hope you're on the mend. Ouch...

[Marianne]

Thanks, Jeremy. I heal pretty quick. Always have.

[Tom]

'Glad you're brother's okay, Jot. Best wishes to you and your family. Thank you for sharing.

[Jot]

Thanks Tom. Really thought we were gonna lose him a couple times there.

[Marianne]

Jot, good wishes to you.

[Jot]

Thanks Marianne. My sister, who works in the cardiac ward where my brother was treated, said, "Only 5% of people who suffer this type of heart attack outside a hospital, survive." My brother is one lucky dog to have someone who saw him go down, knew what to do and was able to do for the 10 minutes needed until the ambulance got there.

[J.J.]

So glad your brother's been given a second lease of life Jot. Lady Luck was right there saying, 'I got you.' All positive energy to him, to you and your family.

I'll try and loop in on the next round.

[C.]

Jot, glad to hear your brother survived. Best wishes for a speedy recovery.

[Paula]

Jot, very glad your brother survived the heart attack and is recovering now. Best wishes to him, to you, to the whole family.

[Jot]

Thanks everyone. He really is doing remarkably well. His strength has returned and there are no issues with his brain or organs. He'll have to wear an AED vest as a short term thing, but he is now expected to make a full recovery. :)

And on another note, Happy Birthday Justin

[Tom]

Happy Birthday, Justin.

And, thank you for all you've contributed to this group.

[C.]

Happy birthday Justin!

[Paula]

Oh, that is good news, Jot. Wishing him a swift recovery.

[Marianne]

Good news, Jot. Happy Birthday, Justin

[Justin]

Oh hey! Thanks everyone for the birthday wishes!

I got up and ran 10.25 miles (you know, for fun - LOL!), then had a good day with the family. I ordered Papa John's pizzas for dinner and savored the chocolate cheesecake my wife made for me. She managed to exactly replicate what my Mom always makes for my birthday, but since we're in quarantine... Anyway, 48 feels great! Thanks again everyone! I certainly enjoy reading all of your creative contributions!

[Paula]

Pizza AND cheezecake--wow, Justin! Glad you've had such a great birthday!

[Jot]

10 miles? I'd be lucky if I could run a mile.

[C.]

I just posted critiques for May stories FYI.

-C

[Tom]

The June theme has been posted.

[Justin]

Paula wrote: "Pizza AND cheezecake--wow, Justin! Glad you've had such a great birthday!"

Thanks Paula! It was a good day.

[Justin]

Jot wrote: "10 miles? I'd be lucky if I could run a mile."

Well, I've been running since the seventh grade. So I have a little history with the sport. :)