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Hi Ariel,Thank you for your offer to beta read!
My book is a 97,000 word fantasy novel about a girl trying to find magic. It's set in a Middle-Eastern-type world where Royalty is chosen by their beauty.
Sixteen-year-old Sondja believes in the old legends, and despite having always been in the shadow of her sister’s beauty, she believes there is something special within herself. Something magical even.
So when a mysterious self-proclaimed Magician shows up in her desert village, even though everyone else doubts him, she does him a favor. In return she receives a gift: a pair of wishing stones that he calls the Compass of Destiny.
Sondja's wish on the stones and her adventures take her to the Royal Palace, and as she uncovers the lies cloaked behind her sister’s beauty, and reveals the true identity hidden behind a Prince’s wooden mask, most importantly, Sondja finds the very thing that all others had thought was lost: magic.
Yet in the end, when a spell to save her life has unintended consequences, she discovers that now that she finally has magic, it may cost Sondja her own life to stop it.
I'm looking for plotholes, boring parts, dialogue that's out of character, is it too slow/descriptive or does that add to the world-building? Basically, a general what you like and don't like about it would be great!
If you think you might be interested, let me know!
Marisa
GreetingsGenre: YA Urban Fantasy/Magical Realm/Witches
Title: Faith Spiritwolfe: Pain and Knowledge
What I’m looking for: I’m worried about the pacing. As it’s more on the novella side of things giving the length, I didn’t faff about and add lots of extra events. I fear it might be too fast paced to be realistic so that’s why I’m seeking Beta Readers.
I’m also open to Critique Partnering as well.
Blurb
Sixteen-year-old Faith Spiritwolfe never had what anyone would describe as a normal life; she can start fires with a flick of her wrist, she has two different colored eyes, and she can transform into a panther. Raised by her ever-distant father who is oblivious to her abilities, all Faith has ever wanted was to learn about the mother who died giving birth to her. She hopes that if she unlocks her mother’s past, she can find out where her powers come from.
When her father’s work moves them to New York City, she enrolls at the prestigious Alexander Prep School, which happens to be where her parents met. Much to her surprise, she finds herself thrown into a centuries-old conflict between two factions of supernatural beings. As Faith starts unraveling the secrets of the mother's past, she learns more than ever wanted to about not only herself but also the true nature of her abilities.
Let me know if you’re interested.
Happy Reading
Vivi
Hi Ariel,Thanks for offering.
I have a 100k novel titled Won’t Let Go that could do with a fresh pair of eyes. It’s a YA with a strong Christian undertone.
Below is the blurb
Tricia has a call—to turn men back to God—a vocation she loves with a passion until a brutal gang rape tears her world apart. Embittered and angry, she leaves the church and takes to drugs and prostitution. Many years later, and after many years of riotous living and unsuccessful attempts at finding true love, Elvis breezes into her life and makes everything perfect until her past rears up its head and everything crashes.
Nevertheless, the gifts and callings of God are without repentance; and God must find a way to make her do His will; time was running out!
Now lying in a coma as a result of an unexplained auto crash, and surgeons work day and night to keep her alive , she knows the danger isn’t in there; it is out there…in the lives she is to touch, the hearts she is to change, and the souls she is to win for God.
Will she get a second chance or suffer the wrath of God?
Regards,
Stephen
thanks for considering all genres, so few people do that. Also this sometimes reads like an urban fantasy, its actually a memoir. This book is about my struggle to re-inflate a mental health non-profit that was on its last legs. When I took the job, I was unaware they couldn't pay my wages. Although mental illness is not funny there are lots of amusing moments in the book. It's just over 100,000 words, but if you're not drawn in by the first 50 pages, you don't have to read it. All and any comments very much appreciated. Thanks!
Hi. This is a young adult fantasy and it is my first manuscript. A group of teens struggle to survive after magic is released into the world.
While a group of soldiers fight to save a town from supernatural creatures.
They must fight monsters and learn about magic if they are to find safety.
Looking for Beta reader for my Completed 14 chapters, 70,000 words thriller. Description below:
Inspector Akinade was aroused by the tears of a crying mother to delve into the haze surrounding her childbirth, whether the baby was a stillborn that was cremated or rather a victim of abduction. He had just stepped on the path of the death hunting him from the past and it was no longer a duty but revenge.
The setting and characterization of the story was contemporary African, which was not so far from the world but the dialogue and description were explicit and universal.
Please let me know if you are interested. Email address: cometary_phoenix@yahoo.com
Two years ago, a sorcerer named Silas saved 22-year-old Aveline from a fire that claimed both of her parents. To save her, Silas imbued her with dark magic that must be spread; the fewer carriers there are, the more the magic decays their minds and souls. Before meeting Aveline, Silas was driven from the Grand Palace, the cultural heart of Alvasta, by Azil, who massacred Silas’ carriers to end his growing influence in the court Azil created. Now, Azil is hunting the last of the dark magic carriers, many of whom have already been driven insane. If Aveline and Silas fail to protect the remaining carriers and spread their magic further, they will end up in the Blackness—a void that awaits those whose souls have fully corroded.
It is part romance, part fantasy - I would consider it to be YA as well. Let me know if you're interested.