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I had something similar happen. I was recently working on a short story in which the main character had recently separated from his wife. The reason for the separation was that she wanted children and he wasn't ready. The story takes place in 1998.
Thanks to one of my wonderful betas (who is also a wonderful mod named Dan) he caught the grave error in this. This wasn't the first time I'd written about this character and Dan remembered that in another story, he and his wife were eagerly trying to have children shortly after their marriage in 1995.
I like challenges like that, though.
Thanks to one of my wonderful betas (who is also a wonderful mod named Dan) he caught the grave error in this. This wasn't the first time I'd written about this character and Dan remembered that in another story, he and his wife were eagerly trying to have children shortly after their marriage in 1995.
I like challenges like that, though.




For a first draft I don't worry about timeline much, but once I'm getting towards a more final version of the book I go through and note how much time is passing and make sure characters are wearing the right kind of clothes for the time of year, and that the weather and environment is logical for when it's supposed to be. Some books have much more complicated timelines than others, especially when I'm also switching from present day to scenes in the past! Timelines really do help to keep things organised, and I don't think they necessarily need to be super complicated if it's mainly issues to do with making sure the weather and seasons are correct, but it can be a pain I've made an error earlier in the book and then have to make corrections at other points further through the book. I'm just so glad my editor spotted the issues in my book that had all the pregnancies in, that could have ended up a bit embarrassing!

I keep track of every chapter, giving it name of day, plus the date, and the approximate time that things are happening. It's all very detailed but then something needs to happen in the story and oops... back I have to go.
I've just spent two days (about 6 hours) going over the timing again. I've given myself a real headache with this wip. It starts in the middle of the action and goes forward but then jumps back to explain things, then continues from where I started. On top of that, half of it is set in New Zealand where, of course, the seasons are upside down and signs of the seasons are also a little different. And the times are sometimes 12 hours ahead and sometimes 11 hours. As the hero goes back and forth by plane (needing connections), it's become complicated. Plus the pregnant lady and getting her to have the baby when the hero is around!
Google now thinks I am planning to fly round the world and sends me appropriate ads. It never sends me any for guns though - phew!
I admit I give this a lot of attention in my drafts - there are times when I remove a passage but use some part of it elsewhere - often during a different season which means I have to be careful checking things like that - even if it's small mention of leaves turning red which suddenly doesn't make sense if the scene was moved to the spring of another year.
In the draft I just finished, there were many scenes shuffled around as collateral damage from the cuts and changes I made so I'll need to check and re-draw my timeline pretty soon.
In the draft I just finished, there were many scenes shuffled around as collateral damage from the cuts and changes I made so I'll need to check and re-draw my timeline pretty soon.



That's a great idea to send the ms to a professional editor. I had a similar experience a couple of months ago. My beta readers hadn't caught some of my inconsistencies. I was floored and thankful when my developmental editor caught them and moved things around.




Thankfully, the way I'm writing in Scrivener makes it easy to rearrange stuff. But I still have to make sure I account for any time mentioned in the sections moved.
It's like a jigsaw puzzle that gets created as I put it together.






I prefer using a general season and not getting so specific on the dates, days of the week, year, etc. as it does take away a lot of the flexibility when you begin to write.



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W.G. wrote: "In a multi-scene chapter, the 2nd scene is introduced by six dashes in the first line (eg: ------) followed by the actual writing. QUESTION - If the second scene takes place at a subsequent time, or a different location, should I get rid of the dashes and instead use a date / time stamp and / or new location line at the top of the 2nd scene? What works best?"
I'm confused. Are the second scene and the 2nd scene the same scene? I'm not seeing anything about a first, third, etc. scene, so calling each scene second is throwing me off. What purpose do the dashes serve in the first place?
I'm confused. Are the second scene and the 2nd scene the same scene? I'm not seeing anything about a first, third, etc. scene, so calling each scene second is throwing me off. What purpose do the dashes serve in the first place?

I sometimes have a similar situation to what you are describing, where I have a shift in time or character POV that is dramatic enough I will put in a subheading with the character name / time etc within the chapter. The scenes are too short to be considered chapters in their own right, but different enough that a normal chapter divider (like the three dots centered on the page) isn't sufficient. In my books this usually only happens near the end when a lot of events are happening extremely fast.
In your case, if you are frequently needing these shifts in time and location within a chapter I would suggest having an overall chapter number or name, and then scene headings, eg:
Chapter One
Location/time
Text
Location/time
Text
Chapter Two
Location/time
Text
Location/time
Text...etc
I'm suggesting this as I feel using location and time as your chapter heading and then also using it to divide up chapters could be confusing. I think you need a separate chapter heading, then location and time subheadings. If it is very important for readers to know when and where you are talking about I wouldn't use dashes to represent these shifts, I would just tell them when and where the action is about to take place.
Of course, I haven't read your book, so I can't really say for sure, but this was my immediate reaction to the situation you described and the genre of book you've written.

Consistency so they know what to expect.
Does anyone else deal with this? I’m guessing I’m not alone.