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*3rd Place* Finding Forgiveness October-November 2014 Contest
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Honest and heart-touching :) Great job!
Sydney wrote: "Honest and heart-touching :) Great job!"Thanks Sydney!
Melanie wrote: "Sydney wrote: "Honest and heart-touching :) Great job!"Thanks Sydney!"
You are welcome :)
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I thought the context of the story HAD to have something regarding Tobi Mac's song actually within it...Next time I will do a story just on the basic concept of the song or theme. That gives me much more room to be creative! Oh well, next time ;)
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NO worries Lena, I loved writing the story and loved wrapping the song within the contents of it. I felt it challenging and that is actually the reason I wrote it, in the first place. So, for next time, I know that there is more room for creativity....But, I loved the whole challenge of basing a story on, only a song, brought me!
Thank you Lena for doing that <3
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The car swerves around the Okanagon bends reaching the peak of the mountain cliffs. My head rolls onto the hard plastic of the window sill to see the logging roads pass by. No bears this year. I am not asleep. Jessica, my 14 year old annoying sister, falls onto my shoulder half asleep. I knock her head off and look back at the mindless window.
"HEY! What did you do that for?" She screamed, still rubbing her head and the sleep from her eyes.
"Just leave me alone, okay. I don't want you to touch me and I don't want to be here right now."
"Doesn't mean you get to be mean. You aren't the only one who doesn't want to be here right..."
"Stop it both of you!" Mom yelled interrupting.
"Don't be so harsh." Dad turned to mom while still trying to watch the road.
"I am a parent too. Don't direct this away from them to me. What did I do? " She steamed.
I rolled my eyes as both their faces kept turning to each other and the profile of their mouths kept moving back and forth debating one another.
"..I'm just trying to say that they need to learn to get along without you always getting involved..." My dad jerked the car for more emphasis of his words.
They're bickering started to get animated and Jessica and I sat on opposite sides of the car. Her arms crossed. My music, now on louder than ever.
My sister couldn't take it any more and began yelling, "Just stop it! Stop it, both of you! What are we thinking? A family trip! This is the worst day ever!"
My mom and dad got quiet and the car swerved to the side of the busy highway.
"Get out. " My dads voice said loud enough I could hear over my music. I looked over and he was pointing to the both of us.
"You don't want to be with us for our family trip or here...." He pointed to the side of the road, "...then, get out!" He demanded. Mom looked shocked.
"FINE!" Jessica yelled. "You coming Steph?"
Jessica opened the door and a car whizzed by snugging our vehicle with it by the force of its speed. The chill of the air from the top of the mountain side began stinging my flesh.
"...not if I have to?" I said, trying to look like I am not getting involved.
My sister started frantically crying and my dad's face turned to pitty, finally.
"Get in then and be quiet!" He sharply said loud enough his voice beat out my music.
I stared blankly as she got in quivering from the cold and shaking from her tears. The car seemed to be in the centre of the world at that moment.
I took my ear buds out and the song "forgiveness" by Toby Mac was playing loud enough for all of us to hear.
To my shock the car was in dead silence as that song echoed the cheap plastic. For once we all sat still. Thinking. Letting the words sink into our hearts. My dad turned and looked at my mom. He brought his hand to her face and touched it gently.
"I am sorry hun." He said. Her face fell in his hand. "Me too!" She sobbed grabbing the hand that softly cradled her face and kissed it.
I looked at Jessica and she seemed so pitiful, yet I saw the little sister that I once loved to play tag with and thought; How can I say I am a christian, listen to Christian music and want God to forgive me...Yet, I can't forgive my parents, or even my little sister?
I mouthed an "I am sorry" to her and she mouth a quiet, "me too!" Dad started the car and smiled back at us.
"I think today we are going to have one of the best Family road trips we have ever had." I looked at his glittering eyes and felt he was truly sincere. My mom laughed and snuggled up to him. I giggled. Embarrassed. They are so funny sometimes. Jessica smacked me and smiled.
"Does that mean I can snuggle up to you and finally get some sleep?"
"No!" I glared.
She laughed and pulled out a crossword book. I put my ear buds in and actually loved the fact that I was on a Family Road Trip....I couldn't help but think about the word forgiveness as the song ended in my ears. How important words are and how they affect us good or bad: from a song, from our lips, from our hearts, especially the word; Forgiveness. I'm thankful for the forgiveness God has given me. I guess that is what life is about in some ways. God forgiving us, so we can forgive others. I smiled looking out the window and suddenly spotted the first bear of the year.
The End
By Melanie Kilsby