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Congrats to Jack McDaniel, Five-time Champion of the Science Fiction Microstory Contest

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Jot Russell | 1709 comments Mod
Filipino Honey
by Jack McDaniel

We march heads down, no longer engaged with the world, mindless drones. The rain that falls in sheets does nothing to fight back the heat; It piles on more oppression, like the horrors of the past few months that have become burned-in memories. We slog through mud and dense forest floors with rifles limp at our sides, our minds as gray as the drowning landscape. At intervals the rains stop and the sun blasts through the clouds and moisture rises from the ground and suffocates.

Thoughts of my Filipino honey buoy my sinking morale.

We are Homeless Brigade, Johnson’s Secret Army, Tormentors of the Gimp, as some of the men say. We still fight, despite being stripped of our rank and commission, despite the Kill On Sight orders issued by our own government. We move because movement is life. We are ghosts because the situation and the land demand it and because we have no recourse or alternative.

We attack secretly and in small numbers. Timed explosives whose shockwaves reverberate through the air long after we are gone. As agitators in the war with the communists we are unseen. Word from Bale is that we’re funded by Johnson and some of his cronies, but that’s just hearsay and supposition.

No one speaks openly of treason, only the righteous would do that. But we didn’t choose Homeless Brigade; We were trapped into it. Secretive orders countermanded the official line to stand-down and prepare for evac. Someone with pull shunted us from the region’s top brass and created their own army. We enlisted without knowing. Word is there are others in the same position as we are.

“They claim it’s us when it’s convenient, but they don’t know,” says Ricci, a short but wide man with many opinions. “Kennedy doesn’t have a clue, man.”

I flash a wry smile.

“Can he get it up anymore?” asks Stone. “I mean, he’s in a wheelchair, right?”

“Who cares, Stoner!”

“Hey, man, the wife’s kinda hot, you know? Just saying, is all.”

“Jesus, Stoner!” Ricci never looks up from plodding through the forest. “That man put a kill order out on us and your only thought is boning his wife.”

“That’s some fine dining, is all.”

Several minutes later Stone smirks, “I’m just a kid. What’s he expect?”

We march in silence for another hour before stopping. Bale says it’s not far, just over a ridge we can barely make out through the downpour.

“Someone needs to hunt,” says Ricci.

“No hunting,” answers Bale, “no fire.”

“Come on, Cap,” pleads Stone, “ain’t no Gooks around.”

“Less than ten clicks to target. Can’t risk it.”

We settle in for a brief rest and whatever cold rations we find in our packs.

Ricci and I huddle out of the rain under a large outcropping of rock. The light bleeds from the sky, darkness soon.

“Wonder why Kennedy tossed Johnson aside?”

“Scandal, remember?” Ricci points his knife at me, some rations stuck on the end. “Johnson’s still being investigated. Sanford is clean. Besides, Johnson wanted to kick the commies out of here. Kennedy wants to dance with ‘em, make friends.”

“Is Johnson still calling for more troops?”

“What I hear, yes.”

“What does Red say?"

Ricci smiles. “Ruskies get more pissed off each day. Gook paper two days ago said they were bringing more troops back. Pissed at Kennedy. Kennedy blames them for our incursions. They blame him. It’s a tangled mess. Whoever’s work we’re doing is winning.”

Filipino honey, dances in my head. “Money, man. That’s all it is.”

“All it ever is.”

“Red don’t know about Homeless Brigade. The marionette—Johnson or whoever—pulls our strings. And we’re traitors. Someone wants war. Three ways out for us, three doors, I figure: disappear, get the war going again, or die.”

“Got a preference?”

“Patriotism don’t exactly work here,” says Ricci. “Might as well go with the flow.”

***

Bale times the night march to get us in position at midnight. The rain hasn’t let up but we are now one with it.

The perimeter is weak—only two guards on duty.

Stone says, “That’s CIA.”

Bale nods slowly, purses his lips. Everyone swallows hard. “These are the men tasked with killing us. Still, target munitions only.”

My stomach turns. “Things have changed. We’re playing both sides now.”

“Both sides, man. Got no choice.” Ricci asks as we cut through the fence, “Choose a door yet?”

“Just now—disappear.”

“Filipino honey,” he smiles. “Groovy choice.”


message 2: by Andy (new)

Andy Gurcak | 91 comments Congratulations, Jack. A fine, lively story.


message 3: by C. (new)

C. Lloyd Preville (clpreville) | 737 comments Great job, Jack!


message 4: by Jot (new)

Jot Russell | 1709 comments Mod
Is that four championships for you, Jack?


message 5: by Justin (new)

Justin Sewall | 1244 comments Great writing Jack!!


message 6: by Timothy (new)

Timothy | 21 comments Great story Jack.


message 7: by Jack (new)

Jack McDaniel | 280 comments Thank you all! (I think it's like 8, Jot). I've been around a while.


message 8: by Jack (new)

Jack McDaniel | 280 comments Andy made a great comment about the diversity of stories. I find alt history a bit difficult as a reader, but imagining a story was fun.


message 9: by Jot (new)

Jot Russell | 1709 comments Mod
I'll check my notes when I get home.


message 10: by Paula (last edited Aug 27, 2019 03:12PM) (new)

Paula | 1088 comments Good story, Jack. And, like your new (forthcoming?) book, Purple-Hearted Man, it makes fine use of interesting and nonstandard language and storytelling.


message 11: by Karl (new)

Karl Freitag | 69 comments Congrats Jack.


message 12: by Karl (new)

Karl Freitag | 69 comments Jot, it would be interesting to see a tally of the number of all-time championships for each writer since the contest started.


message 13: by Jot (new)

Jot Russell | 1709 comments Mod
I have it and will post


message 14: by Jot (new)

Jot Russell | 1709 comments Mod
Though I have an unfair advantage, because I am the only one who has participated in every month since 2012-11.


message 15: by Tom (new)

Tom Olbert | 1445 comments Very well done, Jack. A potent and palpable tale.


message 16: by Jot (new)

Jot Russell | 1709 comments Mod
Posted on a new thread


message 17: by Jack (new)

Jack McDaniel | 280 comments Thanks, Tom and everyone else. I appreciate it.


message 18: by Jack (last edited Aug 27, 2019 09:00PM) (new)

Jack McDaniel | 280 comments I CAN USE A HAND
I have two new books I’ve written and would like some reviews / thoughts on them from the group. One, Poet Of The Moon, is a near future dystopian thriller. It’s about 93,000 words (310 pages). The other, Purple Hearted Man, comes out the first week of January. It’s a shorter book at 44,000 words (180 pages). It’s . . . different. Below is the blurb from the cover. Justin is doing the audio for Purple Hearted Man.

I can get them to you in Kindle, ePub or printed formats. If you like either or both I will ask you to leave a review on Amazon or here on Goodreads when they are released. The early reviews of both are great so I am confident they will be worth your time. As I have mentioned in the past—and as several members here can attest—I will return the favor at any time.

PURPLE HEARTED MAN
Welcome to the rage of life

Purple has a difficult job: He was placed here to take down the One-Eyed God. It’s his mission and he won’t fail. It’s a lonely road for someone like him—a healer—but he has help. The hippies are his friends: Chloe the yogi, Wheat the candlestick maker, and Berrydream, who is in retail. And he has his tribe: Charlotte, Stranger and Jackson. Eventually, the tigers that roam the city might become allies, too. Who can say, tigers are fickle.

The One-Eyed God is nefarious and powerful. His agents lurk everywhere and the aliens are certainly up to no good. Even the one called Sister can't be trusted.

But the universe is wise and has given Purple skills. Getting control of his invisibility will help, but that only matters as long as molecular cohesion is maintained. Most of all, though, Purple has purpose and, of course, he has his broom.

If you are interested email me, please.


message 19: by Jot (new)

Jot Russell | 1709 comments Mod
Jack, please let me know if you need help posting the new contest threads.


message 20: by Carrie (new)

Carrie Zylka (carriezylka) | 286 comments congrats Jack!!


message 21: by Jack (new)

Jack McDaniel | 280 comments Thanks, Carrie! I've missed you. Hope things are going well.


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