Keywords: Time travel, political upheaval, social commentary
What I'm looking for:
This book is too long: where/ what should I cut?
Is the dialogue too academic, or cliche at any point?
Do the chapters need to be restructured? How and where?
Is the beginning way too long, or is it about right?
Is the main character a strong, independent woman and a role model? Does she ever come off as intentionally submissive without purpose or context?
Do my three main characters all go through character changes that lead them to where they’re supposed to be by the end of the book?
Does it make you want to read the next one?
Working Synopsis
Vega Coldathis is a scientist from a humble commune in the republic of Conjow. When her old mentor, Arthese Ensui brings her to the totalitarian theocracy of her youth and shows her an artifact with mythical powers, she is reticent to believe him. Upon her exposure to it, she realizes he was telling the truth when it rips her out of her time period and drops her into another.
Vega is forced to confront the cultural and political realities of being just another face among many alien cultures as the artifact moves her from place to place in the histories of many different species. She is only armed with implanted chips that allow her to speak the language and look the type of each species she visits, but her role among them is never so simple.
When Vega goes missing, Arthese Ensui is forced to find her by the regime for which he works, and employs the assistance of a disgruntled private investigator. As they unravel the mystery of Vega's disappearance, the interest of a larger, more ubiquitous organization known as Management becomes increasingly clear.
But who is Management? Why does Management want the artifact? What is so critically important about a golf-ball sized sphere travelling through time and space on its own agenda?
Vega Coldathis will dedicate her life to finding out.
Thank you in advance for reading and I look forward to hearing your comments!
What I'm looking for:
This book is too long: where/ what should I cut?
Is the dialogue too academic, or cliche at any point?
Do the chapters need to be restructured? How and where?
Is the beginning way too long, or is it about right?
Is the main character a strong, independent woman and a role model? Does she ever come off as intentionally submissive without purpose or context?
Do my three main characters all go through character changes that lead them to where they’re supposed to be by the end of the book?
Does it make you want to read the next one?
Working Synopsis
Vega Coldathis is a scientist from a humble commune in the republic of Conjow. When her old mentor, Arthese Ensui brings her to the totalitarian theocracy of her youth and shows her an artifact with mythical powers, she is reticent to believe him. Upon her exposure to it, she realizes he was telling the truth when it rips her out of her time period and drops her into another.
Vega is forced to confront the cultural and political realities of being just another face among many alien cultures as the artifact moves her from place to place in the histories of many different species. She is only armed with implanted chips that allow her to speak the language and look the type of each species she visits, but her role among them is never so simple.
When Vega goes missing, Arthese Ensui is forced to find her by the regime for which he works, and employs the assistance of a disgruntled private investigator. As they unravel the mystery of Vega's disappearance, the interest of a larger, more ubiquitous organization known as Management becomes increasingly clear.
But who is Management? Why does Management want the artifact? What is so critically important about a golf-ball sized sphere travelling through time and space on its own agenda?
Vega Coldathis will dedicate her life to finding out.
Thank you in advance for reading and I look forward to hearing your comments!