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message 1: by Panic!AtTheWritingDesk, Creator of TheWritingDesk (new)

Panic!AtTheWritingDesk (panicatthewritingdesk) | 641 comments Mod
Hello.
A simple word.
A single word.
One that has the power to change your whole world.
A kind way for you to know,
that someone acknowledges you,
head to toe.
You are important,
more than you know,
so,
Hello.


message 2: by Harper Nicole (new)

Harper Nicole (harpernicole) I had a heart once
But than He came in and pushed it right out
He replaced it with Himself
Every single ounce
He took hold of my body to do what He wished
I like my new heart
But it isn't mine
It's His. - Harper Nicole


message 3: by Eric (new)

Eric Fisk (efisk) | 4 comments "Hello," I said looking into her big blue eyes.

In that instant I imagined her in my life forever. How it would be to walk the aisle with her. All the trips we would share. Even the children and grandchildren that our life together would be blessed with.

Her smile made the seconds feel like hours, and then the years of our future came into focus. This is the woman I want to spend the rest of my life with flashed through my mind. The happy days and those sad days all mixed in together for the rest of our lives. How I could imagine the joy we would share as we journey through our life together. Those times when my shoulder would catch her tears as those days of joy would turn to sadness, but it is what I wanted. I wanted to be a part of sharing that part of life with her.

As I imagined our future together in just those few seconds it took for her to receive my greeting in her mind and process it and for it to return the response I knew was coming, I hoped that she was feeling the same as I was and she could see the future I was seeing. That five letter word I longed to hear could not come fast enough. Doubt crossed my mind as I waited to hear it, hoped to hear it.

"Hello," she said looking at me with her big blue eyes.


message 4: by Markus (new)

Markus | 16 comments Panic!AtTheWritingDesk wrote: "Write one paragraph that is super creepy. Three to five sentences is all you need XD, and above all just have fun!"

The message flashed on the screen for a brief second, but she received it loud and clear. "Don't move, don't blink, it's here." She knew. Struggling to keep her dry eyes open, she could already feel the cold, damp breath on her neck.


message 5: by Markus (new)

Markus | 16 comments Hope it's cool that I'm doing two in a row!

Hello
Said the child to his own mother
Smiling, as he would to any stranger
Hello
She replied, heartbroken, in tears
A polite 'hello' confirming her fears


message 6: by Panic!AtTheWritingDesk, Creator of TheWritingDesk (new)

Panic!AtTheWritingDesk (panicatthewritingdesk) | 641 comments Mod
Markus wrote: "Panic!AtTheWritingDesk wrote: "Write one paragraph that is super creepy. Three to five sentences is all you need XD, and above all just have fun!"

The message flashed on the screen for a brief sec..."


Super weird, and definitely creepy. Good job. :)


message 7: by Panic!AtTheWritingDesk, Creator of TheWritingDesk (new)

Panic!AtTheWritingDesk (panicatthewritingdesk) | 641 comments Mod
Eric wrote: ""Hello," I said looking into her big blue eyes.

In that instant I imagined her in my life forever. How it would be to walk the aisle with her. All the trips we would share. Even the children and g..."


This is really good. Not only is it sweet, super descriptive, and a greeting, but it's also creative and relatable. Nice one. :)


message 8: by Tamra (new)

Tamra  (pleasereadbiothankyou) | 123 comments Mod
It was a stary night
You could still see birds take flight
she was alone under a tree
this is the only place she could be free
her pain and sorrows all coming back
she was soon feeling trapped
All her life miserable and sad
But only one person could make her glad
~Tamra Jernigan


message 9: by Panic!AtTheWritingDesk, Creator of TheWritingDesk (new)

Panic!AtTheWritingDesk (panicatthewritingdesk) | 641 comments Mod
That's good. :) Kim's better at giving advice on this than I am, but they way you were able to create a rhythm while still preserving meaning is supper important. :)
Thank you!


message 10: by Tamra (new)

Tamra  (pleasereadbiothankyou) | 123 comments Mod
yay, i am working on another one :)


message 11: by Harper Nicole (new)

Harper Nicole (harpernicole) Do we have a topic, or are we just writing?


message 12: by Markus (new)

Markus | 16 comments Harper Nicole wrote: "Do we have a topic, or are we just writing?"
There were promts/topics, but they seem to be gone now. If I may be allowed to suggest a prompt: Write an opening of 1-5 sentences in which your character contradict themselves.
Because that's human and real, and it's good to practice making characters resemble that ;p


message 13: by Markus (new)

Markus | 16 comments I guess I should go first, to kind of show what I meant ;p Also since we're doing feedback, how's my prose in this? Anything I should work on?
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Bruce opened his eyes as the music stopped and chatter filled the silence. He glanced past the bar at the clock, whose faded white paint revealed the wood underneath. It's 3 a.m. already? These people should find better things to do with their lives, he thought. The music resumed, and he closed his eyes to let his mind fade once more into the monotone beat of the drums and the burning smell of whiskey.


message 14: by Panic!AtTheWritingDesk, Creator of TheWritingDesk (new)

Panic!AtTheWritingDesk (panicatthewritingdesk) | 641 comments Mod
Markus wrote: "Harper Nicole wrote: "Do we have a topic, or are we just writing?"
There were promts/topics, but they seem to be gone now. If I may be allowed to suggest a prompt: Write an opening of 1-5 sentences..."


The prompt is great, Markus, and your example was quite a good one. :)
You have a unique ability to write what I like to dub as "the human condition", and you use details to help others relate to your character's' thoughts, feelings, and surroundings.
Nicely done! :)


message 15: by Panic!AtTheWritingDesk, Creator of TheWritingDesk (new)

Panic!AtTheWritingDesk (panicatthewritingdesk) | 641 comments Mod
Harper Nicole wrote: "Do we have a topic, or are we just writing?"

I removed prompts, as I was intending to clean up the space a bit and prevent others from using past prompts, as the prompts will change every so often, and I'd like this to be a bit more like a daily writing challenge. :)


For now, however, I'd like if all who would like to take part in this chat/daily challenge/thing to use Markus's prompt, as I quite agree. It is important to be able to personify your characters and describe their thoughts, feelings, and surroundings in a human and relatable way, and contradiction is something that humans love to do and do often... XD
More prompts will be posted in the future, so keep an eye out for them, and try to use the current prompt when posting.

All the best in your writing adventures,
P!ATWD


message 16: by Tamra (new)

Tamra  (pleasereadbiothankyou) | 123 comments Mod
What all uh stuff can you post on here, cause I have a poem, but im not sure if it would be a good thing to put on here, so im just asking before i do anything.


message 17: by Markus (new)

Markus | 16 comments Tamra wrote: "What all uh stuff can you post on here, cause I have a poem, but im not sure if it would be a good thing to put on here, so im just asking before i do anything."

I'm not in charge of anything around here, so don't take my word as the truth, but I think pretty much any activity would be good! :p I, for one, would encourage it :)


message 18: by Tamra (new)

Tamra  (pleasereadbiothankyou) | 123 comments Mod
WARNING: THIS POEM MAY BE DISTURBING
VIEWER DISCRETION IS ADVISED


PAIN

It just seems right
Fists clinch so tight
Just enough force
I need just one more

Please just one
then it will be done
I know its not the best
but ill put it through the test

anything can work
just make it so it hurts
I can take the pain
Though it might leave a stain

I know for people its hard to see
but for me, its easy as can be




what do you think of it so far?


message 19: by Markus (new)

Markus | 16 comments Tamra wrote: "WARNING: THIS POEM MAY BE DISTURBING
VIEWER DISCRETION IS ADVISED

PAIN

It just seems right
Fists clinch so tight
Just enough force
I need just one more

Please just one
then it will be done
I kno..."


Seems like a good start :) It certainly conveys an emotion!
I especially liked this line: "Please just one"

Now, some constructive criticism:
You've forgotten apostrophes in words like it's and I'll.
I don't know if you deviated from the rhyme scheme in the third stanza on purpose, but I found that a bit strange.
Some even more concrete visual images could work well, I think.

Hope this helps :)


message 20: by Tamra (new)

Tamra  (pleasereadbiothankyou) | 123 comments Mod
tbh, i dont understand what you just said, im slow and cant comprehend well :/


message 21: by Panic!AtTheWritingDesk, Creator of TheWritingDesk (new)

Panic!AtTheWritingDesk (panicatthewritingdesk) | 641 comments Mod
((Sorry, I've been gone for a while ^-^ Trying to catch up here...))

It looks good Tamra! However, you're missing apostrophes, like Markus said, and a bit more imagery wouldn't hurt either. ^-^
For example, what is causing the pain?
I can infer that it happens to be cutting, but there are quite the list of ways to self harm... ^-^
Hope this helps, and you're all doing great! Seriously, this makes me so happy, to see all of this amazing writing. :)


message 22: by Panic!AtTheWritingDesk, Creator of TheWritingDesk (new)

Panic!AtTheWritingDesk (panicatthewritingdesk) | 641 comments Mod
Okey dokey! :)
Prompt for this week is:

Dream-catcher: Write something inspired by a recent dream you had.


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