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Alexandra | 7 comments Hello, I would be interested in swapping first chapters, your blurb is very intriguing and I think we would be a good match! I have a YA Fantasy that has endured some thorough editing, but really needs feedback, and I haven't been receiving any from agents.

I have included my query, please let me know if you would be interested in swapping with me!

The Blood Crown has the power to save a kingdom. Or destroy it. It’s been missing for seven years and as time runs out for the kingdom, the race to find the crown may leave no survivors.
Seven years ago, Princess Lyria accepted a deal from a demon lord. Now she is an expert assassin, trained to kill deal-breakers for her demon master. All she wants is to use those skills to kill the Usurper who slaughtered her family, but as the last surviving heir it’s her duty to find the crown. Except to claim it she’ll have to break her own deal, or die trying.
Camryn has spent years running from his past and his vengeful father, but when both catch up with him he’s given a choice: bring back the Blood Crown or be executed. Determined to save himself, he ventures after the crown, only to come face to face with someone he thought long dead. The lost Princess Lyria. As he struggles against his feelings for the beautiful and deadly assassin, he must choose where his loyalty lies; the princess, or his father who is none other than the Usurper she’s sworn to destroy.
Racing against time and treachery, Lyria must struggle to break her demon binding and reach the crown first. If she fails, the land will succumb to the crown’s curse. But succeeding could cost her everything, for defying demons rarely ends well.


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