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message 1: by Madeline (new)

Madeline I have this idea for my NAnowrimo and i need to make a decision but i would appreciate all your opinions. and i mean any good or bad

Theres a girl who is abnormally strong mentally(can read minds and that kinda stuff) and she is an orphan running from something. My issue is deciding what she is running from. i have two choices right now.

1. Her parents familys are fighting against each other over the girl. Her dads family wants to use her to gain power, basically they are evil. Her mothers family wants to use her for good but they are a little nuts. Her parents tried to hide her but they were killed and she ran from the scene. Now her two familys are warring and chasing after her.

2. Her parents were killed in an "accident" and a lady who was exceptionall strong in head as well took her in and tried to teach her to be evil and use her head the wrong way. THe girl refuses and runs from the lady. Now the lady is chasing her saying that she will join forces with her or she will kill her(like she did her parents so she could get her).

THe family thing seems very cool, you know original, but also more than a little weird. And the evil lady seems not so original but makes more sense and would be easier to write. i just dont know. but the good thing is that i have plenty of time to think about it.


message 2: by Ellen (last edited Aug 14, 2009 04:38PM) (new)

Ellen | 16 comments Marco wrote: "What about a company that's trying to use her?"

Combining your suggestion with Madeline’s plot sounds like a story I wrote in high school…only my main character wasn’t an orphan, she just thought she was because the company had kidnapped her when she was too young to remember her family…

Anyway, Madeline…if your character can read minds then she is telepathic; or psychic if she can do more.

Of the two options you have, the first is more original, the second option—as well as Marco’s company suggestion—has been done repeatedly. L.J. Smith did it in her Darkest Powers trilogy: The Strange Power; The Possessed; The Passion and Kelley Armstrong is doing it in her Darkest Powers trilogy: The Summoning, The Awakening, The Reckoning(huh, I just realized that both authors called their trilogies “darkest powers” how confusing). And those are just the two I can think of off the top of my head.

I would recommend reading both series, if you haven’t done so (although, the third book in Kelley Armstrong’s series is not out yet).

...just my two cents worth.


message 3: by Madeline (new)

Madeline Marco wrote: "What about a company that's trying to use her?"

Well i have that - kina - in another story idea so i was trying to think of something different but thanks


message 4: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 11 comments I'm writing a book called Shadows of Light, about a demon named Lumiere, one of the oldest demons on earth, and one of the most powerful. There are only two left of his kind, him and his brother Ombre.
But when Lumiere is captured by his sworn enemy the Nephilim, earth-bound angels sworn to destroy all creatures of soulless origin (demons) But the ones who captured him are a small group of dedicated angels, wishing to be free of the curse given to them by heaven, and when Jazlyn, one of these angels finally figure's out Lumiere is getting a soul, can she save him? Or is he already damned to hell? But when Lumiere is a soul-stealing demon, one who feeds from the very souls and emotions of others, is there any room for his own soul? Is there any room to feel guilt for all those that he has killed, even when he will have to kill again in the near future?
And when Jazlyn slowly unearths his past, will she still try and help him? And then there is his twin brother, Ombre. What will happen to the Demon of Light?
Does that sound like a good story line, does it sound original? I'm trying to deside whether or not its good enough to keep writing...


message 5: by Kritika (new)

Kritika (spidersilksnowflakes) Kriss wrote: "I'm writing a book called Shadows of Light, about a demon named Lumiere, one of the oldest demons on earth, and one of the most powerful. There are only two left of his kind, him and his brother Om..."

That sounds very original; yes, I would definitely continue a great idea like that. I liked how you used 'light' and 'shadow' as the demon names (french, yes?). It gives the characters a little more thematic depth.
One clarification: What do you mean by 'getting a soul'? Does Lumiere obtain a soul by doing good deeds, or by feeling remorse for what he must do?


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