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[Emrys.]

thanks Rosie you're a really good writer to.

[Emrys.]

"Four you can't seriously be thinking about this? Is this what Tris would want more fighting?" I say Four thinks about this for a time I'm surprised when he does finally speak. Even more surprised about what he says. " No she most likley wouldn't have but Tris is dead and I'm sick of staying here doing the same thing over and over again."

[Emrys.]

I love this it is so awesome you guys are all great writers. :)

[Julia]

[Dang! I haven't been on here for days, this is AWESOME!]

It's like a punch in the gut. He just... he just SAID it. Spit it out like it was nothing, like she never meant anything to him.
"Tris is dead."
It literally chokes me. I want to fight back, to tell him that she would have wanted us not to fight anymore but to figure this out in some peaceful way that's fair for everyone, but I can't. Words clog in my throat until I feel like I'm going to throw up or scream or cry or something, so I stop trying.
I need to breathe.
I leave the room. I don't stalk out, or give him a glare as I go, I just go as if I asked the teacher to go to the bathroom during school.
I wish we had at least SOME aspect of normalcy in our lives. But no.
That was a hard blow, the hardest blow I've gotten in a while. I've become used to mentions of her, used to story-sharing when we don't even mean to, I've even gotten used to waking up screaming in the middle of the night with nightmares about it. But never, from Four especially, have I heard "Tris is dead." Nor did I ever expect to.
Was he not in love with her? Did he not grieve for months, YEARS after she died? Did he not cry the hardest he's ever cried in his life after her death? Did that portion of life mean nothing to him?
I try to take the most windy path I can and I end up outside in a little courtyard-looking area. It's very sunny, and green, and flowery, and just the kind of place someone would want to get away to. I find a bench and sit, trying to take deep breaths and think of nothing at all. Not even Tris.
I know I don't want to cry, so I focus on that. Deep breath in, deep breath out. Deep breath in...
And the door opens. Of course someone followed me. Who was it, Four come to apologize? Caleb? Natalie? Why would Natalie try to find me?
I don't turn towards the door - I let its opener speak first.
"What are you doing here?"
Four.
If I were still Candor, I might tell him the truth, that I came here to get away, but instead the words that fly out of my mouth are, "Get away from me."
"I came here to get away from it all, but it's only following me wherever I go."
"IT'S following YOU?!" I almost shout. "You're not the one being followed!"
"I didn't follow you. This is where I come whenever I need to be alone. If anything, you followed me."
"I don't care whose spot this is. All I know is that I was here first and you need to get away from me."
We sound like children arguing. Maybe that's what we've been reduced to - children.
"Why are you so..."
"Offended?" I ask. "Angry? BETRAYED? Because how the hell could you say that about someone you spent sleepless nights thinking and crying about? About someone you spent months teaching and loving and taking care of and fighting with? About someone you've never cried harder for?"
"Because it's true," he says. He just sounds passive - he doesn't sound sad, or angry, or anything. I hate it. "She's gone. We can't make decisions based on what she would have wanted, because we have to do what's right and logical."
"And what Tris would have wanted isn't logical and right?"
"Sometimes, it wasn't! When she sent herself off to death in Erudite?"
"You're still holding a grudge over that?! She's DEAD, you can't forgive her? She gave her life for Caleb, and for you, and for me, and you can't forgive her for one tiny thing she did? What the hell is -"
Four stops me in the middle of my lecture by wrapping his arms around my back... tightly. He puts his head over my shoulder and squeezes me, his arms shaking with the effort.
He's... hugging me? What the hell?
"You can't just hug someone in the middle of a heated argument," I say, trying to tone down my anger a little. "That's not how it works."
"You remind me so much of her," he says. He's obviously trying to hide shaking in his voice, trying to hide weakness like he has for all these months. "You're smart, and brave, and stubborn, but it all makes sense..."
"You didn't mean it, did you?" I ask innocently, like a child asking a parent that they didn't mean the tooth fairy wasn't real.
"I don't know how this works," he says, his voice still weak. "I'm just trying to figure it out. I've tried forgetting, neglecting, remembering, thinking about her all the time, letting her go, and nothing works."
"It's okay," I say. "We're all trying to get through this together. It's all trial and error. Just..."
"I know," he says. "I didn't mean it. I... I'm sorry."
"Okay."

[I wrote a lot... I like where this is going, keep it up!!! :D]

[Emrys.]

"We should head back." I say gently "We need to figure this out together Natalie is hiding something and I'm determined to find out what." I say with a scowl. Four nods his head in agreement and says "You're right I was upset earlier I wasn't thinking. I can't believe I just agreed to help her. Without questioning anything How could I have been so stupid?"

[Casey]

"Because you are stupid," I joke, trying to ease the tension and it works, a small smile flickering on Four's face.

Just as we're about to go back he stops me. "Christina... call me Tobias."

"Why?" I asked.

"Because, you calling me Four, it makes me feel like we're strangers but we're friends..." he seemed awfully awkward by saying this and turned away slightly.

"Let's go then... Tobias," I said softly.

He smiles faintly at me and we walk back in the room. Caleb is fuming, turned away from Natalie as she tries to coax him into listening. She pauses and turns towards us when she hears us enter.

"It's for the greater good. I need you to believe me," she pleads, tears springing up in her eyes.

She's either telling the truth or a really good actress, I think, startled when I see Tobias looking at me strangely.

Realizing I said it out loud I widen my eyes. "Oh, I'm sorry Natalie, but your plan doesn't really make sense. For one, why can't we make the plans here?"

(This fanfiction sounds interesting so I thought I'd join)

[Rosie]

"We can't plan here. I have information and plans back at the base.... Please, please just give me a chance!" Natalie begs us, tears streaming down her cheeks like rivers. She doesn't seem much like adult anymore as she begs us to help her.
I feel a little sympathy towards her. If I was her I would at least want people to listen to me. "OK Natalie, tell us what plans and information you have" I say to her. Four- I mean Tobias- and Caleb give me a sharp look. "I want to at least understand, if you were in Natalie position wouldn't you want people to at least listen to you?" I ask. Tobias nods slowly, "but I don't want to do this" he says quietly but strongly. "This is a bad idea".

[Emrys.]

I take the two boys aside and say in a hushed whisper " I know this is a bad idea, but I want to know how Tris died and she lived. I know it's to much to hope for but maybe just maybe Tris is alive."

[Rosie]

They look at me, at surprised at what I suggested- but if Natalie is alive why not Tris. I try not to get my hopes up too high as its only a very small chance, but it gives me a purpose. Something to do for once.

"I can't tell you, its top secret really- I've already said to much." Natalie says, "You just have to trust me" she finishes, a pleading look in her eyes. Her tears have stopped falling but there is a faint trail where they travelled down her face. "We trust you" I tell her, though I'm not sure if its true or not. Do I trust Tris's mum? Do I allow her to take us to her camp? Yes. I must for Tris's sake and for the people.

[Rosie]

[ I'm really enjoying g
this and you guys are all so good writers! :)]

[Emrys.]

Everyone else is thinking about Tris but I can only think about Will. When I was talking about Tris earlier I was also talking about Will.

[Casey]

Tris admitted that she had shot him but she was in such a rush. Maybe he survived and she didn't notice. The train of thoughts I'm dwelling on makes me feel sick so I push the topic down, hoping I'll be able to ignore it.

"How far away is the camp?" Caleb asks, venom still in his tone.

Natalie looks upset by Caleb's hostility but ignores it. "Not too far, if we could find a car that'd make it quicker."

[Emrys.]

"All right then what are we waiting for let's go." I say then all of a sudden Natalie attacks me.

[Rosie]

She punches me hard in the face and I stumble back in shock. My cheek throbs where her fist connected. Then shes at me again, pushing me against the wall. I shout out in anger.

But then Four is by Natalie's side, dragging her off me. "Natalie! What are you doing!?" Four shouts at her as she kicks out at him. I can only stand and watch in fright as Natalie and Four attack each other- Natalie trying to pin Fo- I mean Tobias- down and Tobias resisting. Then Caleb enters the fight.

[Emrys.]

I have never seen Caleb so angry. He's attacking her with a viciousness I've never seen before. He keeps on shouting the same thing over and over "Where is Tris? Where is Tris?" Finally she responds " She is safe from you Caleb you coward she gave up everything for you. You're lucky we were able to keep her safe."

[Casey]

"What do you mean she's safe from me?" Caleb roars. "You just attacked her best friend! I'm her brother!"

"She hates all of you! You let her die!" Natalie announces.

I stare at Natalie, rage clouding my vision. "You think we let her die? I wasn't even there!"

I want to attack her. I want to get revenge for her attacking me. I want her cheek and back to ache like mine does. I storm out of the room before I can do anything rash. Unfortunately she's our only hope to finding Tris - and maybe even Will.

[Rosie]

It seems like the world ahs turned upside down. Suddenly the people we thought were dead could actually be alive- but how? I don't understand how its possible. Is she lying?

[Casey]

I can hear the three arguing inside but refuse to go back in. Confusion and anger mixed together inside me from the previous events. I wasn't sure if anything I'd ever believed in was true any more.

[Rosie]

Then Four comes out of the room anger visible in his eyes. "Natalie's refusing to take us to Tris- she doesn't want us to see her!" he almost shouts in anger and frustration. He turns and punches the wall behind him. When he turns back to face me tears are streaming down his face. "I... I cant believe this... We NEED to find Tris" Four stammers as he speaks.

Ive never before seen Four like this- he has completely broken down.

[Samya]

This is my favorite thread! The writing is great and the feedback is so postive!!!

[Rosie]

(Noooooo.... no ones writing :()

[Violet]

( Wait.... there's a Fan Fiction wherein Tris and Tobias are together again!!!!!???? MY HEART, MY SOUL Somebody please continue!!!)

[Rosie]

(I would but the rules are that you have to take it in turns so I'm waiting for some to write so I can!)

[Violet]

(Ok Then... Do continue after this!!)
Tris's death devastated him, and now this hope was like the sweetest agony desperate to claw out of him...

[Emrys.]

Tobias we will find Tris. Natalie is toying with our emotions she's playing with us. I believe that Tris is alive but if we're going to find her we have to do it ourselves. I don't trust Natalie she's hiding something.

[Rosie]

We must find out what Natalie is hiding- I'm sure it will help us find Tris. But I need to figure out how to get information out of Natalie. How will this ever work?

I sit in my room thinking. Just thinking about everything that has happened. We have been living a simple, but hard, life until Natalie showed up and now I don't know what to believe.

[Sarah]

[GUYS I HAVE BEEN GONE FOR SO LONG YOU GUYS ARE AMAZING I HOPE I DON'T RUIN IT]

A soft whisper escapes Tobias in the quietness of the room. "She was the only one," he says. "The only one who could have loved someone so imperfect so... perfectly."

Then he turns and leaves, leaving me standing in the room, alone, not even with the memory of Tris to soothe my mind.

[Emrys.]

I start to wonder is it really true is Tris alive? I haven't really truly thought of it till now. All these what ifs float around in my head.


(( I know it's such a good story!))

[Sarah]

[Will someone please continue?? I really loved where this was going guys]