If You could re-write the book, how would you do it?

[Booklover456]

Sort of like fan fic but changing the parts you didn't like! Write book four!

[Ananya]

I would say that she should have had a stronger connection with Xander.

[Aleah]

I would change the writing style, insert a plot development, and also insert character development. The trilogy was worse cardboard in my opinion.

[Rachel]

Take out the love triangle, and use the extra space to add a decent plot!

[Julia]

I think it's a really interesting world to write characters into, and that's why I liked the first books... but Reached... GAH! [FRUSTRATION]

[Dramapuppy]

Rachel Paige wrote: "Take out the love triangle, and use the extra space to add a decent plot!"

In most books I would agree with this but the love triangle was kind of the whole point of this book.

[Rachel]

Dramapuppy wrote: "Rachel Paige wrote: "Take out the love triangle, and use the extra space to add a decent plot!"

In most books I would agree with this but the love triangle was kind of the whole point of this book."

I know it was, and it could have been good. Cassia was just too wimpy and annoying about it. Plus, it could have been an awesome dystopian book if it wasn't all about Cassia going "Ky or Xander? I just can't pick!"
I usually hate love triangles though.

[Dramapuppy]

Rachel Paige wrote: "Dramapuppy wrote: "Rachel Paige wrote: "Take out the love triangle, and use the extra space to add a decent plot!"

In most books I would agree with this but the love triangle was kind of the whole..."

I see what you mean.

[Rachel]

Dramapuppy wrote: "Rachel Paige wrote: "Dramapuppy wrote: "Rachel Paige wrote: "Take out the love triangle, and use the extra space to add a decent plot!"

In most books I would agree with this but the love triangle ..."

I really do understand why other people like them, but I find them annoying.
The girls are weak, the boys are always the same. One childhood love and one mysterious new guy.... The never end the way you want them too, generally with the girl picking the new boy over the childhood love.

I always feel bad for the guy not picked. You live a girl your whole life, she loves you back anf then some new Vampire, Baker, Aberration, comes along and takes her from you.

Seriously, sucks to be them.

[Dramapuppy]

Oh yeah, I agree. I just think this specific book needed one.

[Rachel]

Dramapuppy wrote: "Oh yeah, I agree. I just think this specific book needed one."

I understand why.
I think we'll just agree to disagree on this one.

[Ariel]

okay few things I would change right off the bat

[one] maybe throughout the book series add memories of her and xander as kids, show us their connection and love as it bloomed through the ages.

[two] create some steamy chemistry between her and ky, it fell flat for me didn't really feel a connection at all.

[three] she does a really crummy job of explaining the governments control, i wanted more fear of them something to really build up for retaliation reasons.

okay rant over lol.

[Kholood]

I think if I could I would change some scenes, because they were so predictable.

[Dramapuppy]

I would just take out Crossed completely. It was super boring.

[Rachel]

Dramapuppy wrote: "I would just take out Crossed completely. It was super boring."

Agreed!

[[deleted user]]

The didn't read more than the first book but I could already see where it was going so. Add in a story line where she really does more than fall in forbidden love have a real cause.

[Dramapuppy]

Deja wrote: "The didn't read more than the first book but I could already see where it was going so. Add in a story line where she really does more than fall in forbidden love have a real cause."

Yeah, I can see that. I liked the series but I can see where people wouldn't.

[Dagmar]

i would have loved it if Xander and Ky were totally the opposite of each other .

[Brittany (Brittany's Book Rambles)]

Aleah wrote: "I would change the writing style, insert a plot development, and also insert character development. The trilogy was worse cardboard in my opinion."

SPOT ON! I couldn't even read the third book the writing was so robotic.

[S.B.]

Brittany wrote: "Aleah wrote: "I would change the writing style, insert a plot development, and also insert character development. The trilogy was worse cardboard in my opinion."

SPOT ON! I couldn't even read the ..."
Actually, I tried to read the second book and couldn't get through more than two chapters.
What I would change? I would get rid of the first-person present tense narrative. I find it super annoying! If it had been told as third person, we could have gotten out of Cassia's head and I think there could have been a lot more plot development.

[Brittany (Brittany's Book Rambles)]

S.B. wrote: "Brittany wrote: "Aleah wrote: "I would change the writing style, insert a plot development, and also insert character development. The trilogy was worse cardboard in my opinion."

SPOT ON! I couldn..."

The second book is where I drew the line. I just couldn't take any of it. The plot, the writing, nothing.

[Holli]

I would write about the dystopian society and leave out inactive, self absorbed characters who are completely oblivious to whats going on around them. Take the air out of the book and fill it with something substantial.

[Valerie]

I would write the whole series at a higher intellectual level. The characters took forever to make obvious connections. I'd also use a totally different writing style and pick the plots and sub-plots I liked best and expand them to make it interesting. The things I was most curious about were not developed at all. I'd explain more & delve into the characters deeper. Less whiny wah wah from Cassia. Give the reader a heroine they'd be proud to be.