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Graeme Rodaughan He, I figured.

Are you using an omniscient POV with your story?


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Matthew Williams (houseofwilliams) Nope, third person limited. Though there may be occasions where I crossed over. I try to pay attention to such things, but I've never been too technically-oriented :)


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Graeme Rodaughan I use the same.

It wasn't quite clear who the POV character was in the prologue.


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Matthew Williams (houseofwilliams) Yeah, that's the thing. That prologue was put in there at the insistence of my publisher to create some immediate tension and give readers a preview of what was to come. Originally, it began with chapter one and the main character's POV.


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Graeme Rodaughan Hmmm.

I'm all for a prologue, but it'll need a story hook of some sort to get the reader into the next few pages.

The way you started is fine, there's a crime (not quite sure - specifically, is it murder, abduction, TBD?) then the intro to the MC (Ward) who is in a tough spot for past misdemeanors.

There is no big hook yet, but there is enough to keep me reading.


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Matthew Williams (houseofwilliams) Good, because that was another thing the publisher insisted on, and it's coming up :)


message 57: by Graeme (new) - added it

Graeme Rodaughan As I suspected, there is enough in the Blurb to suggest the hook will be an offer galvanizing Ward into a new course of action (with many travails to come).


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Matthew Williams (houseofwilliams) Graeme wrote: "As I suspected, there is enough in the Blurb to suggest the hook will be an offer galvanizing Ward into a new course of action (with many travails to come)."

No spoilers! ;)


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