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If You Have Read ALL The Harry Potters AND The Percy Jackson CLICK ME!!!!!!
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"What? This isn't..." They said in unison of confusion.
Harry starts pacing, twirling his wand between his fingers.
(I'm sorry, but I can't really have you do that. :-/ It kinda just ends the story super quick, with Harry defenseless. So if you could figure out a different way to add a twist, that would be great. :-))

{ Just realized Harry was muggle raised so he would know what a sword is... } '
*wizards have used swords.. Think griffindor's sword in the chamber of secrets...)

"Sorry about that, man. It's just, you were kind of getting annoying."
JK, JK.
(Is this OK?) "Sorry about that, everybody. I accidentally pulled brake! We will get going in five minutes." says a voice.
Harry and Percy both turn around to see the train conductor.
(Sorry, that was more than one sentence.)
Totally ok. :-)
The conductor gave Percy a werid look, observing his sword. He shrugged and walked back, tipping his hat to Harry.
The conductor gave Percy a werid look, observing his sword. He shrugged and walked back, tipping his hat to Harry.




I screwed up, sorry. Check my post now.
But still, why would Annabeth and Ginny randomly spring out into the scene? Let's start from message 111.
"That's enough. Let's have some FUN!" said Percy, and raised his sword.
For a split second, Percy thought he saw a glowing trident over his head, then it disappeared with a whisper. "I'll try to help, Percy." whisper the sea mist in the voice of his father. Harry flicked his wand, yelling something like "Stupidfy!" but Riptide jumped up and blocked the flash of light.
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