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message 1: by Robbie (new)

Robbie Bashore | 122 comments These are beautiful, Martin! Thanks for sharing them.


message 2: by sliknl (new)

sliknl (silkworm) Shutters flung ajar;
the morning iris unfurls through
eyes of no return.


message 3: by sliknl (new)

sliknl (silkworm) Two white rabbits hop
along the path in the dark -
Nikes in the night.


message 4: by sliknl (new)

sliknl (silkworm) My daughter stitches -
I see in her moving hands,
her mother - exact.


message 5: by sliknl (last edited Mar 27, 2010 06:13AM) (new)

sliknl (silkworm) Carefully balanced,
as fish swim in a brimful bowl,
... blink ... the tears spill out.


message 6: by sliknl (new)

sliknl (silkworm) The pins shower down
like raindrops on a tin roof,
around my bare feet.


message 7: by Robbie (new)

Robbie Bashore | 122 comments Sliknl wrote: "Carefully balanced,
as fish swim in a brimful bowl,
... blink ... the tears spill out."


I was just at the memorial service for a very dear man today, so I especially appreciate the beauty of this one


message 8: by sliknl (last edited Mar 28, 2010 04:44AM) (new)

sliknl (silkworm) Sliknl wrote: "The pins shower down
like raindrops on a tin roof,
around my bare feet."


Robbie wrote: "Sliknl wrote: "Carefully balanced,
as fish swim in a brimful bowl,
... blink ... the tears spill out."

I was just at the memorial service for a very dear man today, so I especially appreciate ..."


It is moments like these which touch us, I think. I remember one haiku (by Buson) which had that impact on me It went like this:
This piercing cold I feel
my dead wife's comb, in our bedroom
under my heel . . .


message 9: by Jo (new)

Jo (Penname8) Summer has ended
But sunlight bathes my garden
My beatiful gold.


message 10: by Gerda (new)

Gerda (Libtech) | 16 comments Open fire roaring
Classical music playing softly
Winter afternoon


message 11: by Gerda (new)

Gerda (Libtech) | 16 comments Wintermorning in the park
the dog smells the icy grass
before disappearing


message 12: by Robbie (new)

Robbie Bashore | 122 comments Hooray! New poets. Beautiful!


message 13: by Jo (last edited Feb 06, 2011 12:04PM) (new)

Jo (Penname8) Chilling my thin hands
the wind and air that's galore
chill my hands. Winter.


message 14: by Robbie (new)

Robbie Bashore | 122 comments Welcome back, Martin!
Welcome, Josephine!
Thanks for your beautiful haiku.


message 15: by Gerda (new)

Gerda (Libtech) | 16 comments swirling mist
wet grass and fresh smells
early autumn morning


message 16: by Robbie (new)

Robbie Bashore | 122 comments Beautiful, Gerda! I was wondering if you might be from Australia, and I see you are! Autumn is my favorite season--enjoy!


message 17: by Gerda (new)

Gerda (Libtech) | 16 comments Thanks Robbie, I was in the park that morning very early with my dog. It's a beautiful autumn in Melbourne at the moment. Cheers.


message 18: by Gerda (new)

Gerda (Libtech) | 16 comments the low sun
nights cold and dark
red leaf


message 19: by Grace (new)

Grace (lionthatroarz) | 16 comments what i like about your haiku is the certain style- you capture very clear images of, idk, a moment.


message 20: by Gerda (new)

Gerda (Libtech) | 16 comments hot sand
rasps between wet toes
run run

Hooray, it's summer here and pretty hot. Will spend quite some time on the beach with the dog.


message 21: by [deleted user] (last edited Jan 12, 2015 01:18AM) (new)

Summertime again
Birds in the air flutter,
squawk, squabble, wild & feral.


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