The Lightning Thief
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I'm having trouble making my book
Matthew
Aug 30, 2016 11:36AM
I've been working on my book for about three weeks and I'm starting to notice something.
My book is to much like Percy jackon. No it isn't about Titans or anything, just read the Prolouge:
Prologue
An eon ago.
Zues, The god of Lightning, Wind, and the leader of all olympians. argued with Artemis, Goddess of Hunt. on why she wont accept having any children, the arguement was so bad that Artemis threatened to destroy all hunting knowledge, so the world would starve. so they made a deal that no demigods will be born again. Ever since then, barely any demigods live.
Now, the only way demigods can be born is if two demigods have a child, or a god breaks the rules.
Now, an Eon later, barely any demigods live, there are two bases for demigods, Camp Ace, and a unknown base.
Two hunters of Artemins, Lena and Lana, and a half-orphan and afro-american must go on a dangerous quest to destroy a Demon Eye to gain Artemis interest.
Is it to much like Percy? and if it is tell me how I can change it to make it less like Percy.
My book is to much like Percy jackon. No it isn't about Titans or anything, just read the Prolouge:
Prologue
An eon ago.
Zues, The god of Lightning, Wind, and the leader of all olympians. argued with Artemis, Goddess of Hunt. on why she wont accept having any children, the arguement was so bad that Artemis threatened to destroy all hunting knowledge, so the world would starve. so they made a deal that no demigods will be born again. Ever since then, barely any demigods live.
Now, the only way demigods can be born is if two demigods have a child, or a god breaks the rules.
Now, an Eon later, barely any demigods live, there are two bases for demigods, Camp Ace, and a unknown base.
Two hunters of Artemins, Lena and Lana, and a half-orphan and afro-american must go on a dangerous quest to destroy a Demon Eye to gain Artemis interest.
Is it to much like Percy? and if it is tell me how I can change it to make it less like Percy.
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Frankly, if you insert a whole base of Greek Mythology. AND if you put demigods into ANY sort of action. You have hunters of Artemis do stuff? A CAMP?! 110% you're sued for plagiarism. Even if you want Greek myths, make your reasoning for the ultimate climax to be strong enough to support it. Starvation of the entire population is not what gods would care about. Zeus has actually attempted and succeeded to wipe out the entire humanity once (in myths). I'm not saying you stop working at this, I'm writing a book myself. But, frankly speaking, if that's your plot and that's your writing style- it has has much time to be developed. Keep trying! :) :)
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I suggest you don't put a modern spin to it (stick to how they spoke in those times). Also don't have your characters very sarcastic because that's basically what Percy Jackson is known for. Maybe make the camp a enchanted fortress or something? Also the names of the hunters are way to similar which is very confusing when reading. At least make the first initial different.
I would have to agree with Mariana. It is way too similar to PJ. Honestly, if you wanted to keep with the story, you could make it a fan fiction because that's pretty much what it is. If not, take out demigods and Greek mythology.
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