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message 51: by Annie (new)

Annie Arcane (anniearcane) | 629 comments @Marwajan: I'd personally say something along the lines of "heavy hitter in the business world". Good luck!!

Hugs,
Ann


message 52: by C.L. (last edited Jul 16, 2016 09:12AM) (new)

C.L. Lynch (cllynchauthor) | 316 comments I know the original post was a while ago, but I think you're thinking of "the hand that feeds her". In English we have an expression where if you backstab an employer you are "biting the hand that feeds you".

Re: business man, you probably want to stick with "powerful man" or something.

In general though, it's always best to show rather than tell. If you have shown that the woman is dependent on her employer, then yu don't need to explain why she wouldn't betray him. And if you have shown how powerful a business man he is, you don't need to come up with a word for him.

RUE - resist the urge to explain!


message 53: by Angela (new)

Angela Joseph | 132 comments Or business mogul, but please not heavy.


message 54: by Susan (new)

Susan | 11 comments Thanks to every one who cared to help in this thread


message 55: by Susan (new)

Susan | 11 comments C. wrote: "I know the original post was a while ago, but I think you're thinking of "the hand that feeds her". In English we have an expression where if you backstab an employer you are "biting the hand that ..."
C that expression seems really good so I can say a woman is completely loyal to the hand that feeds her?


message 56: by Julia (new)

Julia Ban | 8 comments Hi I want to ask about the word retribution. If want to say a man is being punished can I say the man's retribution?


message 57: by Jane (last edited Jul 21, 2016 02:15AM) (new)

Jane Jago | 888 comments Basically no.

Retribution can most clearly be seen as the act of taking revenge on someone. So if A is punishing B then it is A's retribution B is suffering.

You can say B endured retribution. But not B's retribution.


message 58: by Julia (new)

Julia Ban | 8 comments Ah ok thanks Jane


message 59: by G.G. (new)

G.G. (ggatcheson) | 2491 comments And that's why I don't answer this kind of question. I too would have used it the way Julia said because of this definition http://www.learnersdictionary.com/def...
it seemed to fit. (Grumbles) now I need to fix my WIP. Lol tks Jane! :)


message 60: by Julia (new)

Julia Ban | 8 comments Haha, so some ppl can accepted this way?!


message 61: by G.G. (new)

G.G. (ggatcheson) | 2491 comments Don't mind me, Julia. My birth language isn't English. I often make these kind of mistakes. :/


message 62: by Julia (new)

Julia Ban | 8 comments G.G. wrote: "Don't mind me, Julia. My birth language isn't English. I often make these kind of mistakes. :/"
Thanks G.G how come you seem to right good English books when you're not a native speaker?


message 63: by G.G. (new)

G.G. (ggatcheson) | 2491 comments With the help of many English Speaking Betas and a protagonist who is not from this world. :P

(I've also been living in the USA for the last 16 years so that helps a bit.)


message 64: by Julia (new)

Julia Ban | 8 comments Ah good


message 65: by Julia (new)

Julia Ban | 8 comments Hi can I say insulting words rushed from someone's mouth.


message 66: by Riley, Viking Extraordinaire (new)

Riley Amos Westbrook (sonshinegreene) | 1511 comments Mod
It's better to define the insulting words, but there's nothing grammatically wrong that I can see with it, depending on context. Course, I'm no english major, though I have spoken and written it most of my life.

Example if you don't want to use a curse word, but are meaning to insult someone:

Jerk
Punk
Idiot
Stupid
There are more, but I'm trying to keep it clean for you.


message 67: by Julia (new)

Julia Ban | 8 comments Ok thanks, Riley, that was really helpful


message 68: by Jane (new)

Jane Jago | 888 comments Julia wrote: "Hi can I say insulting words rushed from someone's mouth."

I'd probably say insulting words spewed if I was going to use that format


message 69: by [deleted user] (new)

Depends on the context, but if this is a fit of anger, more violent verbs should be used, like erupted, exploded, maybe even gushed. Spewed is okay, too, but a little on the mild side. It all depends on the emotion, and how intense you want it to be.


message 70: by Joy (new)

Joy Porter | 19 comments All good suggestions but why don't you "show, not tell", as the old truism goes. Have the character say an insult or two and then you can say, "as insults spewed, gushed, exploded, etc. from his/her mouth". Usually more effective.


message 71: by Dawn (new)

Dawn Hamilton | 9 comments How about "angry invectives spewed from his mouth, as his/her face turned an alarming shade of red." Would that work?


message 72: by Julia (new)

Julia Ban | 8 comments Wow, I got much more than I wanted, thanks all, I think I'll do a complex of ur suggestions for the scene.


message 73: by steven (new)

steven | 7 comments Hi, hope you're all well. Can I say "mention any fiction book that you can think of your mind?"
Is think of your mind ok?


message 74: by Aislinn (new)

Aislinn steven wrote: "Hi, hope you're all well. Can I say "mention any fiction book that you can think of your mind?"
Is think of your mind ok?"


Hi Steven. Since I'm not quite sure what you mean by that sentence, I'd say no. If I am understanding correctly, I would say either "mention any fiction book you can think of" or "mention any fiction book that comes to mind".

Hope that helps!


message 75: by steven (new)

steven | 7 comments Ok thanks then Aislin


message 76: by steven (new)

steven | 7 comments Hi all. is this sentence right?
(The girl was bending her arm, she was holding a small knife with something written on it, Sarah tried to hold her arm to take what the girl was offering)
Or should I use the word extending her arm instead of bending?


message 77: by Kat (new)

Kat If she is extending her arm, then I imagine her hand moving away from herself.
If she is bending her arm, I would understand it as her hand moving towards herself.

Is the girl trying to give the knife to Sarah, or trying to keep Sarah from taking it?


message 78: by steven (new)

steven | 7 comments trying to give, so I should use extending or folding her arm? And when I say Sara held her arm to take the knife. it means she extended her arm also?


message 79: by Aislinn (new)

Aislinn Steven, I think the phrase you are looking for is 'Sara held out her hand to take the knife'. That's what you'd say if she was accepting the knife from the girl. For the girl, if she's giving the knife, I would say she 'extended her arm'. I think they are your best options. I hope that helps.


message 80: by steven (new)

steven | 7 comments Ok, thanks Aislinn I'll do that, and thanks Kat


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