*MARCH 2016 MICRO STORY CONTEST - COMMENTS ONLY

[Dorthe]

Thanks to Andy and Carrie for taking the time to provide feedback - much appreciated! I learn something about each story from reading what others think.

And, of course, I learn a lot about my own story from having more or less obvious (to me) flaws pointed out. Particularly the ending needs tightening up; and yes, the handsome stranger in the bar is the one who got away with both his head and the bag of credits (I'm oldfashioned enough to imagine an actual briefcase full of money).
I did put in a couple of hints that the chatting tv guy could have seen him on screen and not recognise him face-to-face; but it could have been clearer, I suppose. I always hate it when writers are too obvious and try to avoid that myself, so I end up being obscure ...

[Marianne]

Thanks for the comments, Richard. I think Truth in the story is the space, threshold, doorway, whatever you want to call it between Sleep Fall and the Dream. It is that place of awareness where true consciousness exists, the "clear light". I still don't understand it, so my character cannot ;) She hasn't become that brilliant yet :)