Developing my Short Scenes/How to Improve Them

[[deleted user]]

These are sentences or bits of dialogue that might be included in my novels one day. Thoughts? :)

https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...

[Lura]

I like this:

Raevyn wrote: "“What happens if the wheel in the center of town stops turning, Mama?”
“It won’t, my son. Now don’t talk about such things.”
“But what if—“
“Don’t mention that again!”"

It makes me curious. I want to know more. That would be a great opening for a short story (or even a longer one).

What does the wheel do? Why does it do whatever it does? How long has it been there? And, most importantly, what happens when it stops?

Inquiring minds... ^_-

[[deleted user]]

Thanks! :) I plan to develop it into something...I'll post it here when that comes.

[Alice]

Creative writing challenge: Put all these quotes into one story.

:)