Consequences
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Where did I go wrong?
Holly
Oct 27, 2015 06:14PM
I read the description of Consequences by Aleatha Romig, which deals with disturbing subject matter and wallows in Stockholm Syndrome. From the description, the heroine suffers great abuse (sexual and otherwise) at the hands of the hero, falls in love with him, et cetera, et cetera. If the promotions I'm seeing are any indication, the book's a success. Congrats to Ms. Romig.
So, I wrote a paranormal romance novella in which the hero kidnaps the heroine, the treatment isn't nearly as dire as I believe is in Consequences, and the heroine shows courage and craftiness--in short, she escapes. They eventually end up back together, but only after he agrees to some concessions. This novella has received overall poor reviews.
I'm confused. Considering the popularity of such types of romance, it shouldn't be the subject matter that's the cause of negative feedback. I truly would appreciate some insightful feedback. To get feedback, people will have to read the book. To help with that, The Barbary Lion by Holly Bargo will offered for free on Amazon.com from October 29 thru 31.
So, download and read and let the (constructive) criticism flow. It's difficult to improve as a writer without that feedback.
So, I wrote a paranormal romance novella in which the hero kidnaps the heroine, the treatment isn't nearly as dire as I believe is in Consequences, and the heroine shows courage and craftiness--in short, she escapes. They eventually end up back together, but only after he agrees to some concessions. This novella has received overall poor reviews.
I'm confused. Considering the popularity of such types of romance, it shouldn't be the subject matter that's the cause of negative feedback. I truly would appreciate some insightful feedback. To get feedback, people will have to read the book. To help with that, The Barbary Lion by Holly Bargo will offered for free on Amazon.com from October 29 thru 31.
So, download and read and let the (constructive) criticism flow. It's difficult to improve as a writer without that feedback.
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Nov 13, 2015 07:46PM
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I read Consequences BOOK #1, and I"m currently reading Truth book #2, i find both books very intriguing and the storyline and the characters well written by this author. While the subject matter might be offensive to some let's not forget that this is a fictional story about fictional characters. Aletha Romig gives us a very interesting story filled with lots of mystery, drama , suspense and passion. I for one find this book and series to be very entertaining.
I've read the books 1, 2 and 3 of the Consequences series and I will be honest and say that I was not a fan of it. I didn't give it good reviews. In short, I didn't buy into the redemption of Tony's character. I felt that he was originally introduced to the reader as a villain and depicted as a complete sociopath and I didn't buy into his "change" or what supposedly motivates it.
I've discussed this book on Goodreads in other threads and it seems that many people were drawn to the story due to the mystery elements surrounding Tony's background and why he was doing these things. I don't want to give too much of the story away, but as it progresses, we find out that many characters are not who Claire, the heroine, originally thinks that they are. That part of the story is what I personally think Aleatha Romig did very well. I didn't like the books but I hung in for 3 books because I wanted to see how it ultimately plays out. For me, the ending was a major let down, but the mystery that led up to it was good enough to keep me invested for 3 books.
I haven't read your novella, but it could be that the mystery elements that so many people loved in Consequences did not come across as well.
I've discussed this book on Goodreads in other threads and it seems that many people were drawn to the story due to the mystery elements surrounding Tony's background and why he was doing these things. I don't want to give too much of the story away, but as it progresses, we find out that many characters are not who Claire, the heroine, originally thinks that they are. That part of the story is what I personally think Aleatha Romig did very well. I didn't like the books but I hung in for 3 books because I wanted to see how it ultimately plays out. For me, the ending was a major let down, but the mystery that led up to it was good enough to keep me invested for 3 books.
I haven't read your novella, but it could be that the mystery elements that so many people loved in Consequences did not come across as well.
I've read all the books in series. But took breaks in between because some of the issues are just too heavy. I think what kept me intrigued was not only the mystery surrounding the main characters but also the side characters as well. I got invested in them, cared about them enough to find out more. Good side characters are needed to push complicated & mystery plot lines, to keep the reader interested by continuing to reveal bits and pieces of answers that can lead to more questions. During that time, if the writer is good, the reader gets invested w/ the side characters as well such as Conseq series. Another thing that intrigued me was Tony & Claire's dysfunctional relationship. What also intrigued me was that despite it being dysfunctional, it worked-for them. I kept reading to see what level of dysfunction
Tony was gonna go and what Claire's reactions would be, etc. Was it your first pnml? Well, I hope this helped and I hope you don't give up, keep writing.
Tony was gonna go and what Claire's reactions would be, etc. Was it your first pnml? Well, I hope this helped and I hope you don't give up, keep writing.
Holly Bargo
Thanks for the comments. No, The Barbary Lion isn't my first paranormal, but it's the one that got the ... er ... lackluster reviews. Strangely enough
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