Three chapters of my novel posted for comments and suggestions

[Gabriel]

Hi, the novel I'm working on is a dystopian vision of our world, increasingly polluted and run almost as a police state, in the not too distant future. The working title is "With My Last Breath." I've decided to post the first three chapters to get feedback from anybody who feels they have something constructive to say. You can read these chapters at: https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...