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Kyle's Writings

Alori: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...
-on chapter 2 please bear with me, I typed it really fast and wrote it fast so the grammar is bad and the dialogue and descriptions pretty vague but besides that..lol..you'll get the idea I was going for I hope :D-
MPIU - http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...
-Same thing as the other one, hope yall enjoy :D

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...
And a short story I wrote for School :)
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...
Good job with all of this writing, Kyle! I need to catch up! Well, I did write yesterday but it probably wasn't enough....

Though, this isn't from everyday its just when I have time and then I throw it on GR to catch up :P
I'm gonna try and have another chapter of Alori up tonight :D

Oh yeah, heres the beginning to a story I'm writing in english. Unfortunately I pulled Fantasy-romance out of the hat so heres my first shot at something interesting :P
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...



But yeah the book is amazing but they seriously messed it up like...Langdon is directly contacted by the vatican and never goes to the lab in Geneva. The guy in the wheelchair isn't even in the story and the guy that was murdered wasn't Professor Vetra's father. And a bunch of other stuff :(

And yep- I've read Da Vinci Code-I liked that too. :)

Wow, they don't have Max Kohler? He's a pretty essential part of the story in the beginning
And so is the murder of Vittoria's father, so I don't know why they wouldn't put that in the movie :\
I'm still going to watch it though after I've finished the book ^^

I was so mad when Kohler wasn't in it :(

I have it on paper but I'm too lazy to type them :)

Next chapter of siren :D
By the way this story is sort of more explicit, like its romance so its going to mention sex just wanted to let you knw :D


It's a good start though. I'll give an opinion when there is more story. I'm assuming the narrator is Jace. I read quickly, so that might have been pointed out. Maybe a little bit of a back-story as you continue would be a good idea. ie) How long has he known Sara, have they dated, does she know how he feels, etc. Why are they going on a trip together, alone? Age?

Oh I see where you thought I changed POV, that was the guy who was late for his plane. I add like, 'said the man' or somethign like that :D

Yeah, I don't pay much attention to Write in 2009 because I don't get many comments here so I stuck to WWW and other groups :P

I haven't been writing, thats why I haven't added anything :P My ideas/muse are gone for now. Though I'm sure if I sat down and tried I would think of something but I've been to excited about my trip this thursday to sit still :P
I'll try to have something new up in the next two days :D





http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...