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message 451: by Autumn (new)

Autumn (flwurautumn) | 4987 comments Ohhh, freewriting is my entire life because I'm incapable of producing anything that requires more than five minutes of attention.


Sam~~ we cannot see the moon, and yet the waves still rise~~ | 3061 comments Autumn who is autumny. wrote: "Ohhh, freewriting is my entire life because I'm incapable of producing anything that requires more than five minutes of attention."

oooh that sounds like me too! *high fives autumn* ;)


message 453: by Autumn (new)

Autumn (flwurautumn) | 4987 comments *returns high five* Aha, I have the attention span of a five-year-old.


message 454: by Isaac (new)

Isaac | 8014 comments Autumn who is autumny. wrote: "*returns high five* Aha, I have the attention span of a five-year-old."

gpoy


Sam~~ we cannot see the moon, and yet the waves still rise~~ | 3061 comments Emily [CAESAR AND THE EAGLES OF FEMINISM] wrote: "Autumn who is autumny. wrote: "*returns high five* Aha, I have the attention span of a five-year-old."

gpoy"


?? what does that mean?


message 456: by Valencia (new)

Valencia (empowered) Why is it so hard to hold on to inspiration? Why is it so hard to know that you know? Do you really know?


message 457: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments Um…what do you mean, Valencia? "Hold on to inspiration?"


message 458: by Valencia (new)

Valencia (empowered) To remember what inspires you, even when it's not around.


message 459: by Isaac (new)

Isaac | 8014 comments Sam~ on sleepless roads the sleepless go~ wrote: "Emily [CAESAR AND THE EAGLES OF FEMINISM] wrote: "Autumn who is autumny. wrote: "*returns high five* Aha, I have the attention span of a five-year-old."

gpoy"

?? what does that mean?"


Gratuitous picture of yourself


message 460: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments Um…write it down. Or take a picture. Or something.


message 461: by Valencia (new)

Valencia (empowered) Sorry I didn't mean that literally I was just free writing what I was thinking.


message 462: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments Ohhhhhhh, I see. :D


message 463: by Autumn (new)

Autumn (flwurautumn) | 4987 comments Emily [CAESAR AND THE EAGLES OF FEMINISM] wrote: "Sam~ on sleepless roads the sleepless go~ wrote: "Emily [CAESAR AND THE EAGLES OF FEMINISM] wrote: "Autumn who is autumny. wrote: "*returns high five* Aha, I have the attention span of a five-year-..."

I. HAVE. BEEN. ON. TUMBLR. FOR. TWO. YEARS. AND. I. NEVER. FIGURED. OUT. WHAT. THAT. MEANT. OH. MY. GOODNESS.


message 464: by Cassidy (new)

Cassidy (cassidy52) | 3 comments Hold on to inspiration... I like that. :)


message 465: by Isaac (new)

Isaac | 8014 comments Autumn who is autumny. wrote: "Emily [CAESAR AND THE EAGLES OF FEMINISM] wrote: "Sam~ on sleepless roads the sleepless go~ wrote: "Emily [CAESAR AND THE EAGLES OF FEMINISM] wrote: "Autumn who is autumny. wrote: "*returns high fi..."

*pats Autumn's head*


☽❣≾Кἆяἆ ☾இ☽ סℯἆด ฬỉฑcჩℯธセℯԻ≿❣☾  | 56 comments I have a story in mind, it's about a banshee. I don't know if my Idea is any good so just tell me what you think. So uh... here it is.


Kensia, a girl who just turned eighteen and found out that she wasn't normal like she thought she was and worse she found out that she wasn't even human. She found out that she was a wailing women, otherwise known as a banshee. A girl who screams just before someone dies.

As Kensia uncovers the secrets of her true identity she finds out that she is being hunted, by some kind of coven of sorts. She doesn't know why there after her, but a strange boy who happens to be part of that coven may lead her to the answers to her questions. But can she trust him? He says he wants to help, but is that really what he wants or does he have some dark alternative motive?


I'm not sure if this is any good or if that's exactly how the plots going to be. I kind of just thought of it last night before I went to bed. So please tell me what you think and I'll work from there.


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments ☽❣≾Кἆяἆ ☾இ☽ ℋℴℓℓyωℴℴԂ ℧ηԁℯaԃ≿❣☾ wrote: "I have a story in mind, it's about a banshee. I don't know if my Idea is any good so just tell me what you think. So uh... here it is.


Kensia, a girl who just turned eighteen and found out that s..."


I WOULD TOTALLY READ THAT! I think it's a great idea! Just make sure the romance that I'm assuming will happen between the guy and the banshee isn't too cliche and you should be good!


message 468: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments Commented in the other thread, but I JUST THOUGHT OF THE SEXIEST ROMANCE SCENE. XD

Guy: I love you.

Girl: *shrieks*

Guy: Whaaaaaat?

Girl: Sorry, there goes another one.


☽❣≾Кἆяἆ ☾இ☽ סℯἆด ฬỉฑcჩℯธセℯԻ≿❣☾  | 56 comments Okay, and I'll try not to make the romance to cliche.
Thank you. :)


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments ☽❣≾Кἆяἆ ☾இ☽ ℋℴℓℓyωℴℴԂ ℧ηԁℯaԃ≿❣☾ wrote: "Okay, and I'll try not to make the romance to cliche.
Thank you. :)"


No problem!


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments Taylor [Pardon me while I fanboy over you] wrote: "Commented in the other thread, but I JUST THOUGHT OF THE SEXIEST ROMANCE SCENE. XD

Guy: I love you.

Girl: *shrieks*

Guy: Whaaaaaat?

Girl: Sorry, there goes another one."


*IS CONFUSED*.


message 472: by Sevania (new)

Sevania (sevthedev) | 2512 comments Taylor [Pardon me while I fanboy over you] wrote: "Commented in the other thread, but I JUST THOUGHT OF THE SEXIEST ROMANCE SCENE. XD

Guy: I love you.

Girl: *shrieks*

Guy: Whaaaaaat?

Girl: Sorry, there goes another one."


Ohmigod hahahahahahahahahahaa


message 473: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments @Saru

The girl is a banshee. She screams when someone dies. Think about it.


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments Taylor [Pardon me while I fanboy over you] wrote: "@Saru

The girl is a banshee. She screams when someone dies. Think about it."


OHHHHH OH GOSH HAHAHAAHAHAHA.


☽❣≾Кἆяἆ ☾இ☽ סℯἆด ฬỉฑcჩℯธセℯԻ≿❣☾  | 56 comments lol, funny. :)

Okay, so this is how I decided to start my story. What do you think so far? Should I start it differently or is this okay?

~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~

Chapter one

“I already told you I don’t know why I was screaming” Kensia said for about the fifth time that day.

Dr. Frankferd sighed softly, “Were you scared, or perhaps you saw something.” he said.

“No I wasn’t scared and no I didn’t see anything.” Kensia said, “I was just having a good time with my friends, hanging out at the beach. Then suddenly I started scream for no reason. Then the next thing I know I’m waking up in the hospital with a doctor telling me that I have a concussion. Apparently when I finished screaming I passed out and hit my head on a log or something.” she said a bit irritably.

Dr. Frankferd nodded slightly, and he must have noted her irritation because he went on to say, “I know this must be frustrating, but maybe it’ll help if you play over the whole night for me. So that we’ll both get a better understanding of what happened.” he said.

“I already went over it with the police” Kensia said.

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message 476: by Isaac (new)

Isaac | 8014 comments Taylor [Pardon me while I fanboy over you] wrote: "Commented in the other thread, but I JUST THOUGHT OF THE SEXIEST ROMANCE SCENE. XD

Guy: I love you.

Girl: *shrieks*

Guy: Whaaaaaat?

Girl: Sorry, there goes another one."


Is it bad that I kind of want her to scream and him to be the one that dies

Like yes good couple and then nO WHAT JUST HAPPENED


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments Emily wrote: "Taylor [Pardon me while I fanboy over you] wrote: "Commented in the other thread, but I JUST THOUGHT OF THE SEXIEST ROMANCE SCENE. XD

Guy: I love you.

Girl: *shrieks*

Guy: Whaaaaaat?

Girl: Sor..."


I WANT THAT TOO.


message 478: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments @Emily

I considered the same thing. XD


message 479: by Dana (new)

Dana (danachewy) | 735 comments ☽❣≾Кἆяἆ ☾இ☽ ℋℴℓℓyωℴℴԂ ℧ηԁℯaԃ≿❣☾ wrote: "lol, funny. :)

Okay, so this is how I decided to start my story. What do you think so far? Should I start it differently or is this okay?

~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~_~..."


Hi Kensia! I think the start of your story is just fine! But I have a question though, why would Kensia be talking to the police, just because she was screaming? I think that you are trying to build up suspense, but I recommend that you give us a little more, so that we don't end up confused. :)


message 480: by Dana (last edited Aug 08, 2013 01:18PM) (new)

Dana (danachewy) | 735 comments Okay, so, freewrite time. Yes, this is like my first poem after a long time. Any comments welcome~! (Oh, btw, it's about one of my best friends in Taiwan ;))

The fireflies are in my backyard.
You’re halfway across the world
(and then some)
but you’re in my mind today.
‘Fireflies’ is your favorite song, yet you’ve never seen a real one.
I’d save a few in a jar for you, but they’ll die and I’ll
never pass the airport security check.
I’d take some pictures,
but you could just Google ‘fireflies’ if all you wanted were
images.
It makes me sad,
how nothing makes you happy anymore.
Fireflies blinking in the night,
And in the morning I awoke and saw them dead
on the patio, the porch light on.
I imagine you crying on the other side
of the world
in the study, alone,
your brother upstairs in his bedroom
and your mother downstairs in the kitchen
and your father at work, somewhere,
wearing a tie and a suit and carrying a briefcase
Not knowing
that his son is staying up late at three o’clock in the
morning on the computer,
chatting,
and not knowing that he’s
just as lonely as me.


message 481: by Isaac (new)

Isaac | 8014 comments I like that poem. It was kind of bittersweet.


message 482: by Dana (new)

Dana (danachewy) | 735 comments Ooh, thanks.


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments That was beautiful. :'(


Sam~~ we cannot see the moon, and yet the waves still rise~~ | 3061 comments Dana ~tears in my eyes but not down my face~ wrote: "Okay, so, freewrite time. Yes, this is like my first poem after a long time. Any comments welcome~! (Oh, btw, it's about one of my best friends in Taiwan ;))

The fireflies are in my backyard.
You’..."


wow, dana, i really like it!


message 485: by Dana (new)

Dana (danachewy) | 735 comments Thanks! That means a lot to me. What did you like about it though? (Specifically?)


message 486: by Dana (new)

Dana (danachewy) | 735 comments Anika wrote: "(This one is on my blog.)

Dedicated to Talia Joy, who died on July 16, 2013
You will always be remembered.


A knock at the door
A mother goes to answer
Expecting to see a person
But instead a box..."


RIP Talia. I love how innocent "Do you think they sent me a star?" sounds. I'm going to write something about #TaliasBucketList or #TaliasAngels when I have time.


message 487: by Katarina (new)

Katarina | 491 comments I want to write about Talia Castellano! The cancer Youtube star!


message 488: by Dana (new)

Dana (danachewy) | 735 comments Um. That's who we're talking about.


message 489: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments *does not know who that is but will find out right now*


message 490: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments Hm. That's interesting. Makes the poem a lot more powerful.


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments *nodsnods*. It's so sad. :(


message 492: by Sevania (new)

Sevania (sevthedev) | 2512 comments I know! She was amazing :(


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments She was. :(


message 494: by Sevania (new)

Sevania (sevthedev) | 2512 comments So many :(


Saru (Queen of Bookland) (sarulovesbooks) | 3290 comments What? :(


message 496: by Sevania (new)

Sevania (sevthedev) | 2512 comments The emoticon. :(


message 497: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments :(


message 499: by Sevania (new)

Sevania (sevthedev) | 2512 comments :(

:(

Just keep swimming.


message 500: by Taylor (new)

Taylor  | 0 comments *cries*


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