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message 1: by Bee (new)

Bee (justabluebee) Hi, I didn't know where else to post this, so.. XD
This is a short story of mine. A one shot. I wrote it in dutch, but translated it to english so I could share it here on Goodreads. I'm sorry for the faults in English you will probably find. xD
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Untill the end

Angels have no philosophy but love. ~ Terri Guillemets

"Audrey," muttered Skye with a weak voice. "You do not have to stay." She looked at me with half-closed eyes and smiled. Gently I squeezed in her hand and shook my head.
"Yes, I do. I'll stay with you until the end, "I whispered. I had always promised her. We both knew it wouldn’t last long. Her pain would almost come to an end. She fought so long and so hard and I was with her every step of the way. It took a great effort to stay strong for her. Not to collapse and then crawl away in a small corner.
"Do you remember how it started," she asked softly and I smiled. I would never forget. Skye was new at school and it did not start like some romantic story. Skye stood out, refused to follow the crowd. With a broad smile, she walked across the schoolyard. Her long black hair shining in the sunlight. It did not occur to me to go to her. I was too shy and insecure. I was a follower and always alone. I wanted to stand out as little as possible.
When we had to work together in English class, I had to talk to her. That’s how our friendship started. We were just good friends for a long time. After some time that just wasn’t enough anymore.
It was a beautiful, warm Saturday in May when she kissed me for the first time. We had already been on the road all day and in one way or another, we ended up at the beautiful lake in the middle of the forest on the outskirts of the city. There at the edge of the lake, she kissed me. It was perfect, the first kiss you dream to have. But it was with a girl. I was afraid of the reactions and if they would judge me. Skye was always very understanding. It was all new to me.
When I finally had the courage to tell it to my parents, they responded better than expected. My mother said she expected somewhere and my father was his cheerful playful self and started to tease me right away.
That was three years ago.
"Yes, I remember. How could I ever forget? "Again I gently squeeze her too thin hand. She smiled and immediately took a violent coughing fit. Quickly I took the dish that stood beside the bed and caught the blood that she often coughed up. That happens when you have lung cancer.
"Sorry," she murmured, with tears in her eyes.
"Hush, it's okay," I said as I wiped the blood from her lips with a handkerchief.
"No ... I don’t mean… Sorry to leave, "she whispered. I looked at her and felt a tear running down my cheek. Her coral blue eyes looked at me, still full of regret. She was bold now, but a knitted hat that I made for her a few months ago, blocked that. She was so terribly thin that I was afraid to break something if I could squeeze it and so terribly weak. She couldn’t hold a glass of water to drink, it was much too heavy.
"Skye ..." I searched for the words I was looking for, didn’t know what to say.
"You know what the first thing was I thought when I saw you four and a half years ago?" she asked quietly, and I shook my head. "I thought: that's the most beautiful girl I've ever seen." She smiled. "Audrey, you have to promise me something."
"What then," I said with tears in my eyes. Her voice sounded so weak. It took her an awful lot of power to say what she wanted to say.
"Promise me you will not only continue. You'll find someone, Audrey, I'm sure. You have so much to give. You made my life, Audrey, but I'm just one chapter in yours. "I smiled at the sound of that last sentence. That came from our favorite movie P.S. I love you. "Promise?" She looked at me, frowning and I nodded.
"I don’t want to say goodbye Skye. I don’t want you to go." Tears streamed down my cheeks, I could no longer stay strong. Not now end was approaching at a furious pace. I felt her hand was getting colder and increasingly losing strength.
"I love... you. Audrey." After saying my name she blew her last breath and immediately the devices beside the hospital bed were beeping.
"Skye? Skye!" For a moment I was alone in the room, just me and the now lifeless body of Skye for me, but then came the nurses, carefully removing the wires and tubes of her skinny body. I felt someone hold me when she left the room. Our love wouldn’t end here. It would never end. Skye was a part of my heart and she would always be. Always.

Our dead are never dead to us, until we have forgotten them. ~ George Eliot


message 2: by Clare (new)

Clare dooley (claredooley) Ohh biek... That was lovely! I'm like all upset, & I want to know more! Are you going to continue? Please keep me posted if you are, if we're not already friends I would like to see if you have room on your dance card for me? I'm Clare ...what a beginning! A regular well is what you are, depth and sadness and its effin great!


message 3: by Bee (new)

Bee (justabluebee) Clare wrote: "Ohh biek... That was lovely! I'm like all upset, & I want to know more! Are you going to continue? Please keep me posted if you are, if we're not already friends I would like to see if you have roo..."

It's a one shot, so this one isn't going further. Glad you like it! I'm writing for almost 11 years now so. :P This is something I wrote for a competition on another site. =)


message 4: by Clare (new)

Clare dooley (claredooley) Well did you win? That was pretty bad ass! N yeah, you entertained me mildly... Jk it was rad!


message 5: by Clare (new)

Clare dooley (claredooley) Oh and what's your favorite book?


message 6: by Bee (new)

Bee (justabluebee) Clare wrote: "Well did you win? That was pretty bad ass! N yeah, you entertained me mildly... Jk it was rad!"

I got through to the next round, but I had to stop because of my writer's block. xD
My favorite book? Just take a look at my best-books-ever shelf. :P


message 7: by Clare (new)

Clare dooley (claredooley) No, you started it with your question, anty up... Fav book from your mouth:) congrats on effin shit up to round 2! Writers block is a nightmare, attacking at the worst times.


message 8: by Bee (new)

Bee (justabluebee) Clare wrote: "No, you started it with your question, anty up... Fav book from your mouth:) congrats on effin shit up to round 2! Writers block is a nightmare, attacking at the worst times."

Okay. xD At the moment my favorite book is Forbidden by Tabitha Suzuma


message 9: by Clare (new)

Clare dooley (claredooley) Yup, you are awesome! I think your review was poetic as well! Alone, alone... It's hard for me to imagine you feeling that way, with all your awesome. Thank you for letting me see it through your eyes.


message 10: by Bee (new)

Bee (justabluebee) Clare wrote: "Yup, you are awesome! I think your review was poetic as well! Alone, alone... It's hard for me to imagine you feeling that way, with all your awesome. Thank you for letting me see it through your e..."

Ahww, such nice words. I'm flattered. xD I feel that way a lot. You would be shocked if you new all of me. Haha. xD This should give you an image:

I fight against my tears
Put a smile on my face
Waiting ‘till my heart hurts no more
Knowing that will never be the case

But I won’t give up
‘cause no matter how hard life seems
No matter how hard I want to cry
I’ll always have my dreams.


Oh and you said in answer to my question that we didn't even have coffee yet. I'm drinking coffee right now, so if you also take a cup of coffee, we had coffee togheter! :D


message 11: by Clare (new)

Clare dooley (claredooley) Oh my, it's like magic because I am also relishing a blissful cup of the magical elixir called coffee. So in affect we are having coffee together. Dreams... Yours seem hopeful for the old soul that is inside you, peering out of your eyes, speaking through your writing. Words are Wind friendo, and yours are dancing all the way into my home in Philly pa. Like all the elements, words will always have more strength when they are slammed into our world. The world needs more of your words. Fuck anybody that hasn't realized your brilliant, I've known you for five minutes & I'm intrigued


message 12: by Bee (new)

Bee (justabluebee) Clare wrote: "Oh my, it's like magic because I am also relishing a blissful cup of the magical elixir called coffee. So in affect we are having coffee together. Dreams... Yours seem hopeful for the old soul that..."

Really? That's the nicest thing anyone ever said to me! Thank you for that! I grew up pretty quick. Mentally that is. I've been bullied all my life, but now I'm kind of happy. I'm still very insecure, but that'll get better. =)


message 13: by Clare (new)

Clare dooley (claredooley) Bullied! By whom! This world is so full if those maggots that enjoy torturing another person because they have nothing clever or intelligent to say, so they deflect to an amazing person(enter you) & try to silence you before you have the chance to pull out the awesome & open everyone's eyes to what an idiot maggot is doing. Pathetic. And yes I meant every word. I'm surprised your surprised, your a smart chick, you don't know how talented you are? I'd believe you can only read Braille & own a walking stick before I could fathom how you could be so confused? You=amazing it's simple math really .. Oh this coffee is divine, & the company... Exhilarating , so interesting, I'm glad we decided to have coffee and talk life


message 14: by Bee (last edited Dec 08, 2012 01:18PM) (new)

Bee (justabluebee) Clare wrote: "Bullied! By whom! This world is so full if those maggots that enjoy torturing another person because they have nothing clever or intelligent to say, so they deflect to an amazing person(enter you) ..."

Yeah, all my life, by pretty much everyone. My guess is that they are just jealous because they can't do anything as good as I can write. (Ahum) And I try to silence everyone who says I'm amazing/awesome/brilliant/... I don't really think that high of myself. :P Thank you so much for your kind words. It means a lot me. =)
And the coffee is divine indeed. Especially with some cookies to dip in it. Nomnomnom. n_n How magical that a girl from Belgium and a girl from Philly have coffee together even if they are miles away from each other.

Maybe I'll try to write something in English next time. Everything always sounds better in English. :P


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