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2. have kinda strange or not-used-as-much names
3. mutation idea: looks that kill lol
Thank you so much! To be honest, this is the first time I've ever attempted a longer story in modern times. I'm not exactly sure how I'm going to have them meet. That's the next idea. Maybe they should meet online, or on a plane or train somewhere, or perhaps a literal collision. Those are always fun.

sorry i know this is a lot but if you dont please tell me i wont be offended or anything. :)

Literal collision would be fun, but not really effective, because you don't ever actually talk to the person who you run into on the streets. Maybe you check your pockets to make sure that they didn't snatch your wallet, but you don't actually talk to them.
People also don't really talk to strangers on planes/trains/busses, because people who are alone are reading or talking on a cell phone or staring out the window, and other people are together and talking to each other.
The only way literal collision would work is if it's a car collision, and both cars are damaged to some point. Except then there would be angriness between them, and that would delay the plot.
You could have one of them be 'that new person' at school or work. Or they could meet on some sort of sports team, or at a club of some sort (maybe they're into cooking or crafts or scouts)
I was thinking (I know, dangerous) about the source of their mutations. It would have to be natural, I would really hate to follow the "Max Ride" phenom. I mean, fanfic is good, but I can't, and won't, write it.
But the thing is, there has never been a GOOD genetic mutation. So this one might be dormant.
This group is dying! It's saddening!
But the thing is, there has never been a GOOD genetic mutation. So this one might be dormant.
This group is dying! It's saddening!

Ooo! Wouldn't it be cool if somebody was a third gender! They weren't male or female... They were something else, which was caused by a mutation of on of the X chromosomes or the Y chromosomes. (I'm pretty sure that you need at least one X to be semi normal... there's a bunch of genes on there... like the gene for blood clotting). So maybe they have a bizarre shaped chromosome, like a B. Or an M. Or an O, or something along those lines.

like a person was a Gnome? Or like something was a Shmoo?
I think the six toes thing kind of freaky.
I think the six toes thing kind of freaky.


That's one of the ideas about how the whole world could've been populated after the flood: the different children of Noah went to different localities, and the gene pool was so concentrated, which caused different skin colors and stuff.
I don't know.
I don't know.

Like I said, I don't know. It's an intriguing idea, though, as a mental exercise, to ask how it would affect a marriage, being stranded alone in the wilderness, and all.
He was probably more brownish, actually, because he was born in Canaan. And it's rather comforting, to me, because it's a reminder that God loves everyone.

I'm thinking a few main characters who have mutations that give them strange abilities and yet serious drawbacks. Absolutely no plot ideas. Here's what I have:
Charrie 1: Maylin
Descrip: tall, black hair
Advantage: Amazingly fast runner
Disadvantage: Overcome with sudden, debilitating headaches, during which she loses control of herself
Also, other charries would be appreciated.