The Last Dragon King (Kings of Avalier, #1)

by Leia Stone

“I’ve kept a dark secret from you your entire life,” she said

Lol. At least she’s direct.

Holy Hades! A woman fleeing a battle was thrust into early labor in Cinder Village?

Why is that shocking? This seems very forced.

But highborns didn’t come here. Some people had been known to hide here.

-_-

“I sent for Elodie. She was the most advanced in laboring at the time, but word came back that she was sick with the black lung and couldn’t help.” Elodie died of the black lung the year I was born, then my mother became the village midwife. This must have been the event that started her career!

This writing is pretty juvenile and overly obvious. Also if her mom became the village midwife because of that then how were they hurting for money and food. Midwives are in demand. Maybe she’s a shitty midwife.

I told her of all the times we tried to get pregnant,

Like… she told her of the times she got laid to try and get pregnant?

“Oh wait!” my mother called. “I almost forgot. The highborn woman also said that she’d put a protective spell on your magic but that it would wear off with time as you come of age. If the sniffers do catch you, play dumb. Say you are mostly human with diluted dragon blood.”

🙄 mhm. This writing is just odd. It’s juvenile and obvious and of course there would be but idk let her find out her powers were concealed or something. Don’t blatantly just announce it to the reader.