Grim and Bear It (Stay a Spell, #6)

by Juliette Cross

I’d had

Should be - I had.

Jules had advised me several months ago,

Remove the word had

He seemed almost scared, even though his expression and dark gaze—ever fixed on me—hardly had changed since I’d walked through his front door.

The word ‘had’ isn’t needed

chewed my nicotine gum

Note - you dont chew the gum, you place it like chaw so the nicotine absorbs into your system. Swallowing it is bad for you.

“I’m no Prince Charming.” He clamped his jaw as if trying not to say something, but he did anyway, his face dropping an inch closer to mine. “But if your Prince Charming ever did come, Clara, I’d have to fucking kill him.”

“Um, Ruben and I got married last week.”

WTF?! In the kast book ALL her sisters & her parents with them in England when they got engaged , AND Ruben told Jules their moms were planning the wedding BECAUSE EVERYONE WAS THERE!

feeling Henry’s nearness on my right

Do you notice how best selling authors dont ever add direction info for simple things? They just let the reader use their imagination. SJM. Stephen King. Riley Sager. Simone St. James. None of them do this. It seems to only happen in poorly edited books — like the Forth Wing series

had to deal

Remove 'had to' and change ‘deal’ to dealing. Juliette needs a new editor