Good Neighbors: The Full Collection

by Stephanie Burgis

long, metal snouts

First of many excess commas between non-coordinate adjectives

pretty, hammered silver

rambling, old coaching inn

sky blue, borrowed carriage

teasing, sandalwood fragrance.

tightly-leashed with fury.

No hyphen with an adverbial phrase, only adjectives.

first, pivotal step

big, four-poster bed

like the spikes of an eerie wheel.

spokes?

swimming, underwater skeletons

quick, twisting gesture—and

bulky, firefly-shaped ring

The woman sighed “It ends

sighed.

it was centuries’ old,

No apostrophe.

final, flickering remnants

fabulous, knee-length black jacket

chill, warning breeze

recent, tearful farewells

single, cohesive point.

fretful, meowing sounds

last, lingering nerves

madcap, matchmaking journey,

poor, scalded eyes.

cool, bare, white shoulder

Yes to the first comma, no to the second.

casual, lounging position

fabulous, hip-length, black-and-silver velvet jacket.

No to both commas.

long, satin-clad legs

bubbling, yellow and red burns

gaps in-between.

No hyphen

strange, sizzling smell

helpless, undead creature

strange, hollow, rapping sound

No to 2nd

odd, rapping noises

hours of tortuous conversation,

torturous?

walk down the street, side-by-side.

No hyphens

long, red hair

tiny, glowing, golden stars.