Release (Release #1)

by Aly Martinez

I stared down at my watch, the minutes passing with the agonizing speed of millenniums. while Nora fidgeted beside me.

I stared down at my watch, the minutes passing with the agonizing speed of millenniums. while Nora fidgeted beside me. Incorrect punctuation, need to change the period after ‘millenniums’ to a comma.

He’d jostle me until he had me in the perfect position, snug in the curve of his front, and when he’d finally sag behind me, he’d let out a content hum.

He’d jostle me until he had me in the perfect position, snug in the curve of his front, and when he’d finally sag behind me, he’d let out a content hum. Incorrect word tense, need to change ‘content’ to ‘contended’.